"The Gift of Life 2003"
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Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I particularly like two things about this story:
First that it is written in rhyme. This gives it a poetic feel, a tendecy I fave seen a few times recently on this site, that I find appealing in short stories.
Second that an eighteen year old cannot believe in his death until it is explicitly shown to him. This goes with the old adage 'I'm too young to die.'
Thanks for sharing. Kate xx
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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I particularly like two things about this story:
First that it is written in rhyme. This gives it a poetic feel, a tendecy I fave seen a few times recently on this site, that I find appealing in short stories.
Second that an eighteen year old cannot believe in his death until it is explicitly shown to him. This goes with the old adage 'I'm too young to die.'
Thanks for sharing. Kate xx
Comment Written 08-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Why thank you so much Katherine for stopping by and Yes.
I occasionally give credit to my 18-year-old son Jason.
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Comment from prettybluebirds
The word (lieing) should be (lying). Other than that, it is your usual fantastic and descriptive writing. I love these stories you are writing on Jason's behalf, and he must appreciate it too.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
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The word (lieing) should be (lying). Other than that, it is your usual fantastic and descriptive writing. I love these stories you are writing on Jason's behalf, and he must appreciate it too.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
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Forever and always getting those two words mixed up.
That's why they said it English language is very hard to completely master.
But when it comes to this writing thing?
Yes, I think I've gotten that licked..
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Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Another strong post by you. As always your word choices are excellent. And your posts are so unique I don't think your name needs to be included for anyone to recognize it!
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
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Another strong post by you. As always your word choices are excellent. And your posts are so unique I don't think your name needs to be included for anyone to recognize it!
Comment Written 08-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
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It took me hundreds of thousands of tries and I've learned a lot from my successes and mistakes during my writing in the past 20 years.
Thanks Mike
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