Comment from Theodore McDowell

Excellent

A very intense poem that gets into the psyche of this heinous woman serial killer. There are some fine turns of phrases in this story within a poem. Nice job.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2022

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022

Thanks Theodore.
It's nice when your work is reviewed properly.
Doctor Ricky

Comment from Frank Malley

Good

There are dark deeds behind an innocent-seeming cup of coffee. A couple of minor errors: drolling should be drooling, I think, and 'Now enjoy [the] teeth of [its] taste. 'It's' means it is, and it's often a typo. One line, "As you enjoy the waste of me" seems puzzling: are we talking about arsenic poisoning or something else? This line suggests some pretty disgusting possibilities, and it also seems extraneous to the poem's development. This poem treating of a serial murderess could be scarier with better chosen examples from her repertoire of murder.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2022

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022

Thanks for your review.
My review is based not on Grammarian issues but content.
Example: This was well written, rich in theme and Imagery.
It read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
...
Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional, while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep written g and reviewing Frank.
Doctor Ricky
1024.
"Still Preaching the Choir here at Fanstory "

reply by Frank Malley on 02-Aug-2022

I'll avoid reviewing you in the future. I certainly don't need a model for how to write a review. If you review based on a verbal template, it's unlikely that you make any pertinent observations about what you review. Good luck. Frank

reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022

I've run across this problem so many times in the past 14 years.
Some perhaps retired educators when it comes to English literature and the word.
Are many ways to present in many words in which to use and many many poems to share.
A true writer also knows how to properly review not on particularly style when it comes to grammar but on the heart of what is being presented.
I have made this perfectly clear in the past there are Young writers.
Here on Fanstory.
I know my abilities and how my work is being reviewed and presented and it's mostly of the highest quality.
When I see a difference in the review I realize it's not the writer but the reviewer.
These reviewers don't know how to write very extremely jealous.
You know how to write now learn how to properly review?

Doctor Ricky 1024

reply by Frank Malley on 03-Aug-2022

Not to worry - self-delusion is an almost universal problem. Reality is a bitter pill.

reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022

Yeah.
Finally reviewing yourself and I agree!
That's why they give me the privilege to black people like you.