The Return
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Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Playing catch-up--will be reading the next two--this story is enthralling--I am awed by the richness of the descriptions and the character developments.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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Playing catch-up--will be reading the next two--this story is enthralling--I am awed by the richness of the descriptions and the character developments.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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Aw, thank you, Liz, I really appreciate you coming and reading these chapters. And what a lovely review! Thank you! Love and hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from lyenochka
So...Margot will briefly take over Meg's body so that they can implement Bessie's plan? It's good that they found out the dastardly evil plan that Miles' father did to Meg's father. Hope they can pull this off!!
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2022
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So...Margot will briefly take over Meg's body so that they can implement Bessie's plan? It's good that they found out the dastardly evil plan that Miles' father did to Meg's father. Hope they can pull this off!!
Comment Written 30-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2022
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Yes, you have it! I think you are the only one, Helen! LOL It is as simple as that. Will it work? Let's see. Thank you so much, my friend, I really appreciated you review. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
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Yay! Glad I am on the right track.
Comment from F. William Lester
The story is moving right along. My deepest condolences for the loss of your friend. I will keep her in my thoughts.
Again, I'm dropping in late. I've missed a couple of chapters, but I'm still able to follow the plot. I did find a nit noi (that's Thai for small--very small) item that caught my eye (I've a knack for nit nois as you've probably noticed :) ). In the following quote, "...It were easy for me with everyone in their beds.' Bessie reminded Margot as they went down the stairs.", the second sentence is actually a tag for the dialogue and the period after "beds" should be a comma. It amazes me how I can miss the big stuff and get hung up on the small stuff. I hope this is helpful.
Good luck with the book. Good writing, my friend. Be well. Frank
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2022
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The story is moving right along. My deepest condolences for the loss of your friend. I will keep her in my thoughts.
Again, I'm dropping in late. I've missed a couple of chapters, but I'm still able to follow the plot. I did find a nit noi (that's Thai for small--very small) item that caught my eye (I've a knack for nit nois as you've probably noticed :) ). In the following quote, "...It were easy for me with everyone in their beds.' Bessie reminded Margot as they went down the stairs.", the second sentence is actually a tag for the dialogue and the period after "beds" should be a comma. It amazes me how I can miss the big stuff and get hung up on the small stuff. I hope this is helpful.
Good luck with the book. Good writing, my friend. Be well. Frank
Comment Written 30-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2022
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It's those little nits that make the difference, so, thank you so much for pointing it out, Frank. I've made the correction. Thanks for the lovely review, my friend. :)) Sandra. xx
Thank you for your kind words regarding my friend, she will be free of pain, and with many others of her family who went before her. Warm hugs, my friend.
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You're always welcome, Sandra.
Comment from J. P. Olesen
Hi, Sandra,
Finally getting around to reading this submission.
I believe I wrote several reviews for your novel, Betrayal, and now, you're well into another book. The output and quality of writing from you and other authors at this site is astonishing. Couldn't find a flaw anywhere.
Best of luck with new project!
Sincerely,
J. P.
P.S.: Condolences for your recent loss.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2022
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Hi, Sandra,
Finally getting around to reading this submission.
I believe I wrote several reviews for your novel, Betrayal, and now, you're well into another book. The output and quality of writing from you and other authors at this site is astonishing. Couldn't find a flaw anywhere.
Best of luck with new project!
Sincerely,
J. P.
P.S.: Condolences for your recent loss.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2022
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Hi, J.P. Thank you so much for reading this part, and your lovely compliment! Yes, you did review, Betrayal, and now I hope you'll stay with me for this one. :)) I really appreciate you awarding this part a six star, my friend. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
Thank you for your condolences. That was really nice of you
Comment from estory
Well you flesh out the motivation for Margot to continue on with freeing Meg from her curse, and validating the need for the story in this premise of congruent timelines that people create by living their lives. Bringing it out through dialogue makes it seem more plausible, more real to the reader. I think Bessie's accent also makes this all seem more real, more on the fly. The suspense is building gradually...estory
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2022
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Well you flesh out the motivation for Margot to continue on with freeing Meg from her curse, and validating the need for the story in this premise of congruent timelines that people create by living their lives. Bringing it out through dialogue makes it seem more plausible, more real to the reader. I think Bessie's accent also makes this all seem more real, more on the fly. The suspense is building gradually...estory
Comment Written 30-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2022
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Thank you, Estory! What a lovely review. I'm so pleased you think this is believeable, that's brilliant!! It will start moving on more now. Thanks, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from l.raven
HI Sandra, I am so sorry for the loss of your friend(Carole)...my prayers and heart go out to her family and friends...she is now resting in peace...and has gone home...
you have kept Carole with you...with the love of your writings...you finally have some one true to talk to...
instead of a family of ghost...I'm sure Carole is smiling down on you...
another awesome chapter my amazing friend...
I have a feeling Margot won't be returning to the
past again...to much says she won't want to leave Miles...
after all...when a man starts kissing all over your neck...
sending chills down your spine...those are strong emotions to walk away from...
face it...when her and Meg cocoon into each other...and Miles wraps his big strong body around them...who will feel the love...your going to have a world wide wrestling match in there...me...no...me...Miles take me...this should be very interesting sweet girl...let's see how they pull this off...
I love your story told you...and always holds my complete attention...always wanting more...sending all my love you...Linda xxoo ð???ð???ð??¹ð??? your in my prayers...
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2022
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HI Sandra, I am so sorry for the loss of your friend(Carole)...my prayers and heart go out to her family and friends...she is now resting in peace...and has gone home...
you have kept Carole with you...with the love of your writings...you finally have some one true to talk to...
instead of a family of ghost...I'm sure Carole is smiling down on you...
another awesome chapter my amazing friend...
I have a feeling Margot won't be returning to the
past again...to much says she won't want to leave Miles...
after all...when a man starts kissing all over your neck...
sending chills down your spine...those are strong emotions to walk away from...
face it...when her and Meg cocoon into each other...and Miles wraps his big strong body around them...who will feel the love...your going to have a world wide wrestling match in there...me...no...me...Miles take me...this should be very interesting sweet girl...let's see how they pull this off...
I love your story told you...and always holds my complete attention...always wanting more...sending all my love you...Linda xxoo ð???ð???ð??¹ð??? your in my prayers...
Comment Written 29-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2022
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A threesome!!!! LOL!!
Thank you, Linda, for your kind comments, Carole was one of those ladies like you, who would go out of her way to do anything for anyone. She helped me through the death of my late husband. I don't know what I'd have done without her.
Now, Miles and Margot-Meg, what to do? I'm sure Margot could answer that. Lol. Now we have to get them together, that will be interesting.
Thank you, my sweet friend, you know you can always make me smile, you are a special lady. I's thinking of sending you lots of humongous hugs, and love that would fill the universe!
I hope you're doing a bit better, I think of you all the time. Love always. Sandra xx
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I'm so sorry Sandra...I wish I could take the pain away...all I know is we have to grieve in our own ways...and time...you'll always have her memories...lovely moments to remember...
and yes a threesome...or kind of a threesome...it can't end with Miles and Meg...going on a honeymoon...and Margot and Bessie going home...and just having tea for two...so it should be very interesting...
if anything makes me happy...it's making you smile...and you...are always soooooo welcome
my amazing friend...sending tons of love coming your way...I'll email you...Linda xxoo
Comment from rspoet
Hello Sandra,
So sorry to hear that Carole passed away. Now you are keeping her voice alive
in this marvelous story. She's likely smiling at each new chapter.
Oh those tangled webs deceit will weave, but Margot and Bessie appear to be
up to the task of unwinding each thread.
It seems Lord Brandon and solicitor (and perhaps Richard) have some ulterior motive, since they didn't make any money on the stock trade. Oh the English gentry; nothing is beyond their unscrupulous dealings. :)
This is an excellent, tightly woven chapter, my friend.
Well done.
Robert
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2022
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Hello Sandra,
So sorry to hear that Carole passed away. Now you are keeping her voice alive
in this marvelous story. She's likely smiling at each new chapter.
Oh those tangled webs deceit will weave, but Margot and Bessie appear to be
up to the task of unwinding each thread.
It seems Lord Brandon and solicitor (and perhaps Richard) have some ulterior motive, since they didn't make any money on the stock trade. Oh the English gentry; nothing is beyond their unscrupulous dealings. :)
This is an excellent, tightly woven chapter, my friend.
Well done.
Robert
Comment Written 29-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2022
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Thank you, Robert. Yes, each time I write the words "I's thinking," I have to smile. Carole was just one of those wonderful people who always thought of others before herself. I'll miss her. I might write about her one day.
Thank you so much for this lovely review, and all the stars, Robert. Now I've managed to get past that part, I'll be able to go full steam ahead with the investigation. Fun times ahead. I'm really pleased you thought this part was well written, I feel as if I am gradually becoming a writer!! Ask Pam what she thinks. Warm hugs, my dear friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment from alexisleech
I'm with you, Margot! When you come across a horrible situation like this, it becomes personal. Yet again, you have drawn your readers in with perfect attention to detail, Sandra, and I await (as always) your next chapter. Superb!
Alexis xxx
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2022
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I'm with you, Margot! When you come across a horrible situation like this, it becomes personal. Yet again, you have drawn your readers in with perfect attention to detail, Sandra, and I await (as always) your next chapter. Superb!
Alexis xxx
Comment Written 29-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2022
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Aw, thank you, Alexis. I really do appreciate your lovely review and the golden star. I'm over the moon that you enjoyed this part, it took ages to get it right. Sending a big hug across the English Channel to you in France. Lots of love, Sandra xxxxx
Comment from dmt1967
This is another great chapter. I thought it was the best one you have written so far and really enjoyed it from start to finish. Thank you for sharing and take care.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2022
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This is another great chapter. I thought it was the best one you have written so far and really enjoyed it from start to finish. Thank you for sharing and take care.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2022
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Thank you so much! What a lovely compliment. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this part, it was quite a hard one to get right. And a big hug for the sixth golden star!!! Love and hugs. Sandra xx
Comment from Cindy Warren
I'm so sorry you lost your friend. She must have been a treasure, like Bessie. She might not have understood all the legalese, but she was smart enough to get the general idea what those papers were. The obvious thing would be to leave them where Miles will be sure to find them, but she may not do the obvious.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2022
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I'm so sorry you lost your friend. She must have been a treasure, like Bessie. She might not have understood all the legalese, but she was smart enough to get the general idea what those papers were. The obvious thing would be to leave them where Miles will be sure to find them, but she may not do the obvious.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2022
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Thank you, Cindy. Yes, Carole was a real treasure and I'll will miss her terribly.
You're idea is a good one, we'll see whether that's what they do. :))
Thank you so much for your lovely review, my friend. I appreciate it a lot. Warm hugs, Sandra xxx