My Daughter
for the contest Angels Amongst US3 total reviews
Comment from BethShelby
This is a good story and I also believe in angels, but I think you should go back through your story and check the word Angel. You are spelling in wrong. You are spelling it angle and instead of angel.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
This is a good story and I also believe in angels, but I think you should go back through your story and check the word Angel. You are spelling in wrong. You are spelling it angle and instead of angel.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
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lol, I'll go back and check that. I need to have that spelled correctly. Thanks for pointing it out.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Where did it come from? Where had it been? Did angels take up residence in a post-mortal existence or are awaiting in a pre-mortal world. An image arranged for by our conscience, perhaps.
Where did it come from? Where had it been? Did angels take up residence in a post-mortal existence or are awaiting in a pre-mortal world. An image arranged for by our conscience, perhaps.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2022
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job with your contest entry, Mystery Author. I was engaged from start to finish to find out the conclusion. Your words flow smoothly with great imagery. Of course, the angel guided you then.
May I suggest `
Just by the door which lead ( led ) outside to the cars. From around the corner(,) I saw something white peek around. I kept looking. The figure stepped out [ try not to repeat around--I can't think of a change, but maybe you can IF you wish. ]
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2022
You did a good job with your contest entry, Mystery Author. I was engaged from start to finish to find out the conclusion. Your words flow smoothly with great imagery. Of course, the angel guided you then.
May I suggest `
Just by the door which lead ( led ) outside to the cars. From around the corner(,) I saw something white peek around. I kept looking. The figure stepped out [ try not to repeat around--I can't think of a change, but maybe you can IF you wish. ]
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 17-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2022
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I missed that. Thanks for pointing it out to me. I'll correct it. Thanks for your kind review.
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be sure and recount words.