Once Upon a Time
A story about before and after and now.8 total reviews
Comment from LisaMay
You say it took you a while to write this poem - well, it was worth the effort, Jose. It shows how resilient love is, even when covered over with snow in evil's dark storm. Life has an indomitable spirit, always waiting to be renewed, and sharing love provides the nurturing. This is a nice poem.
angels needs an apostrophe in the last line = angels'
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2022
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You say it took you a while to write this poem - well, it was worth the effort, Jose. It shows how resilient love is, even when covered over with snow in evil's dark storm. Life has an indomitable spirit, always waiting to be renewed, and sharing love provides the nurturing. This is a nice poem.
angels needs an apostrophe in the last line = angels'
Comment Written 26-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2022
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Thank you, Jenny. :) By a while, I meant about 2 hours. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Beautiful entry for the Rhyming contest writing prompt contest.
The rhymes do not seem forced. Your poem flows well. It draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
I like the nature and spiritual theme.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2022
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Beautiful entry for the Rhyming contest writing prompt contest.
The rhymes do not seem forced. Your poem flows well. It draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
I like the nature and spiritual theme.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2022
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Thank you, Gypsy Blue Rose. I'm glad you liked it. :)
Comment from Louise Muller
This is a beautiful poem. I love your writing style. It flows wonderfully, inviting the reader to continue. My favorite line is 'Evil slithered disguised.' Gorgeous writing. Good luck.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2022
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This is a beautiful poem. I love your writing style. It flows wonderfully, inviting the reader to continue. My favorite line is 'Evil slithered disguised.' Gorgeous writing. Good luck.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2022
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Thank you, Louise. :) I'm glad you loved my poem! Thank you for the stars. Have you voted?
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Yes, well, I have voted. There was no contest for me, really. You got my vote just because your poem was beautiful. There was another poem called I Recall which was gorgeous, too. Made me miss my mom :( Good luck, and keep up the wonderful writing.
Comment from The Mom/DarleneThomson
Dear writer,
I read your poem, then reread it. You met all the contest requirements as far as I can tell. Your poem had a great rhyme scheme. Your poem flowed very consistently. you did tell a love story in a poem. I enjoyed the artwork as well. Best wishes in the contest.
Blessings,
Darlene
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2022
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Dear writer,
I read your poem, then reread it. You met all the contest requirements as far as I can tell. Your poem had a great rhyme scheme. Your poem flowed very consistently. you did tell a love story in a poem. I enjoyed the artwork as well. Best wishes in the contest.
Blessings,
Darlene
Comment Written 24-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2022
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Thank you, Mom/Darlene. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from royowen
What a lovely ballady song you've written here, something to gladden the hardest heart and soften the soul, beautifully written in abab rhyming, and a most articulate flow and language, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : As Angel(')s smiles.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
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What a lovely ballady song you've written here, something to gladden the hardest heart and soften the soul, beautifully written in abab rhyming, and a most articulate flow and language, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : As Angel(')s smiles.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
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Thank you, Roy. I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for the typo. :)
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Most welcome
Comment from Gloria ....
Yes I can imagine this took some time, but what a fine story you have written here. Your rhymes are sublime as the contest calls for, and the story has a happy ending which is something that always pleases me.
Wishing you great luck with the voters. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
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Yes I can imagine this took some time, but what a fine story you have written here. Your rhymes are sublime as the contest calls for, and the story has a happy ending which is something that always pleases me.
Wishing you great luck with the voters. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
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Thank you, Gloria. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Your comments are very welcome. :)
Comment from Gee
Very nice rhyming poem for the competition.
Nice little story.
I hope you do well in your contest.
thanks for sharing your poem with us.
It is appreciated
Gee
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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Very nice rhyming poem for the competition.
Nice little story.
I hope you do well in your contest.
thanks for sharing your poem with us.
It is appreciated
Gee
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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Thank you, Gee. I like to try different ways of writing. I'm glad you like it.
Comment from Saria/Shreyamsi
What a lovely rhyming poem you have composed! Your poem is set on an unfortunate reality- where love resides, hatred finds a way to settle in. I hope that the world's hatred could be as easily torn apart as the evil in this poem. Nonetheless, all readers of your poem will continue to share love (it sort of proves that people who read are less likely to be evil).
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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What a lovely rhyming poem you have composed! Your poem is set on an unfortunate reality- where love resides, hatred finds a way to settle in. I hope that the world's hatred could be as easily torn apart as the evil in this poem. Nonetheless, all readers of your poem will continue to share love (it sort of proves that people who read are less likely to be evil).
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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Thank you, Saria/Shreyamsi, for sharing your love with me. I'm glad you liked it. Take care, my friends.