Comment from Patty Palmer

Excellent

This is well-written and imaginative. Describing the drink and the change in her was interesting to read. She did have quite a happy time, didn't she? Good luck with the contest.
Patty

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022

Thank you so much for reading my poem, I'm always happy to hear from you. :)

reply by Patty Palmer on 23-Jan-2022

You're welcome!
Patty

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Excellent entry for the The Drink Poetry writing prompt contest. You followed the rules of the contest well. The rhymes do not seem forced. Your poem flows well. It draws on emotions and it presents strong images.

I love the fantasy of the transformation drinking the magical potion.

Good luck in the contest.

Gypsy

Gypsy

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022

Thanks for this great review. :)

Comment from Debra White

Excellent

Hello :)
I enjoyed reading your poem.
It is descriptive, in perfect rhyme and meter and your story telling is engaging. It sounds to me like Mila had her drink spiked and was taken advantage of... I'm happy that she seemed oblivious to that possibility and wasn't left feeling used!
Good luck in the voting booth :)
Best wishes, Debra

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022

Thanks for reading and reviewing my poem. A lot of people found it negative, but it was more about magis then malice. Thanks again. :)

reply by Debra White on 24-Jan-2022

You're welcome :) I really enjoyed your poem... Congratulations on your first place finish! x

Comment from Tom Horonzy

Good

I loved it. The elementary elements flowed judiciously. If I was drunk, I would sound similar in clarity. It worked for me, to the nth degree, and yet what if... someone with a Ph.D. would try to edit it how it would read? Not me. :)

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022

I'm glad you liked it. It doesn't take someone with a Ph.D though, to know that you think it could be improved upon. Based on the rating you gave, you probably have some suggestions. I always appreciate that because I learn from it. Thanks again. :)

reply by Tom Horonzy on 22-Jan-2022

No suggestions. First, we all have literary license to pen as we please. Secondly, the article is written living the experience of a night out... or in, thus clarity would not be of necessity. I do not hold an advanced degree and thus "not me" holds true to suggestions on this work.
I don't know the in-out of rating but to star at the top would be something without thinking what if I was writing this. Bless you.

reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022

I seldom get stars at the top..hahaha. Thanks for reading my poem. :)

reply by Tom Horonzy on 22-Jan-2022

Comment from Gee

Excellent

Cute poem and a twist at the end.
A little sad for me though.
A friend got drugged like that.

But none the less your poem flowed well and had that touch of humor.
Thanks for sharing with us.
I hope you do well in your contest.
Gee

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022

Thanks for reading. I'm sorry about your friend, I didn't mean to bring up bad memories. This was really more about magic then malice. I appreciate you reading my poem. :)

reply by Gee on 22-Jan-2022

oh please don't apologies.
this is the world
Thanks
Gee

Comment from WriterHeather

Exceptional

I love your story and your presentation here. Sounds Ike she had a wonderful night. Maybe she should just keep the memories close and not go looking for another dose. Very well written

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022

Hahaha ...thats hilarious! I think you may be right. Thank you for this great review. :)

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Good

Wonderful poem my dear wise poem posted, so colourfully, so meaningful, but being a reader I could not read a word of the post with plethora, zigzag way of colour mix with background and font of same colour; please check and help readers to enjoy; only self-pride, self-entertainment, self-enjoyment is yours, let readers read and enjoy, know your wisdom; I'm not a teacher, so forgive is divine philosophy did not work out, everyone forgets and ignores advise, forgiveness, and self-pleading; so four stars; ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D R)

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2022

Thanks for reading my poem.

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

This is well made and fulfills the contest requirements. It also, does a good job of telling an adult fantasy tale. Although, it seems even without the magic potion, she could have had a passionate night. She went to the room to do just that. I guess the new body for was his pleasure.

Very interesting.

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2022

Thanks so much. You are right, her body metamorphosis was for his own benefit...the cad! Thanks for reading my crazy drink poem. :)

Comment from Carol Hillebrenner

Excellent

You tell an interesting story with unexpected outcome from that drink. I'm not a poet so I don't know what form this poem is, but it seemed a good rhyme scheme to tell you story. Best of luck with this.

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2022

Thank you for this great review. I don't know what form this is either, I usually don't pay attention to that...but it was a fun write. Thanks again. :)

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

This sounds like a mad night of passion and that drink helped to loosen this woman's inhibitions which can sometimes be a dangerous path to walk, a lustful night described here, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2022

Thanks for this great review. Have a great day. :)