Murder at the Melodrama
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Melodrama, Act, Scene 4"Comedy-mystery set at rehearsals for melodrama.
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Comment from BethShelby
This was a great script. It had a good plot and good characters. Arlo was always a saccastic person who didn't seem to care who he hurt so I'm glad he was the guilty one. Excellent play.within a play.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2021
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This was a great script. It had a good plot and good characters. Arlo was always a saccastic person who didn't seem to care who he hurt so I'm glad he was the guilty one. Excellent play.within a play.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2021
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Thanks a bunch for your review, and special thanks for the super sixer. I'm so glad you enjoyed the play within a play. judi
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Judi.
Other than the fact that the non cops solve the murder mystery, two things really jumped out at me. The first thing was the fact that Madge could not wait to get rehearsal going again to prepare for the show. They solved the crime, but the show came first. The other thing that jumped out was the fact that Arlo left all of the incriminating evidence in the piano bench. That was really a stunner. One might think that a murderer would clean up his paperwork and not leave it where anyone could find it. I guess he figured that he was the only one that would ever play that piano for the melodramas.
Robert
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2021
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Hello Judi.
Other than the fact that the non cops solve the murder mystery, two things really jumped out at me. The first thing was the fact that Madge could not wait to get rehearsal going again to prepare for the show. They solved the crime, but the show came first. The other thing that jumped out was the fact that Arlo left all of the incriminating evidence in the piano bench. That was really a stunner. One might think that a murderer would clean up his paperwork and not leave it where anyone could find it. I guess he figured that he was the only one that would ever play that piano for the melodramas.
Robert
Comment Written 09-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2021
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Thanks so much for your review and comments. I guess Arlo was counting on hiding something in plain sight. It was a coincidence that Madge wanted to include that song. judi
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You're very welcome.
Comment from royowen
They've wrapped up the murders now, and caught them dead to rights. Arlo was found out, and they were amazed that he could go undetected all those years. What a fine post and script, and a rare subject. Well done, great job. Blessings Roy
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2021
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They've wrapped up the murders now, and caught them dead to rights. Arlo was found out, and they were amazed that he could go undetected all those years. What a fine post and script, and a rare subject. Well done, great job. Blessings Roy
Comment Written 09-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2021
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Thanks so much for your review and comments. I'm so glad you stuck with the script. Sometimes it does take a long time for the killer to be found. Sometimes they're never caught. Arlo was careful to try to blend in. judi
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Well done
Comment from Judy Lawless
As nice wrap-up to this script, Judi. I never would have suspected Arlo, but when I think about it, he was always in plain sight, but he didn't relate to any of them.
A few typos: "Wasn't that sweet of him?" I think it should be "them" to correspond with the previous sentence.
"look in the piano bench and see of(if) you can find a copy?"
"I just want to say you're all invited to my Maple Tree In(n) for your after party."
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2021
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As nice wrap-up to this script, Judi. I never would have suspected Arlo, but when I think about it, he was always in plain sight, but he didn't relate to any of them.
A few typos: "Wasn't that sweet of him?" I think it should be "them" to correspond with the previous sentence.
"look in the piano bench and see of(if) you can find a copy?"
"I just want to say you're all invited to my Maple Tree In(n) for your after party."
Comment Written 09-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2021
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Thanks so much for your review and comments. You've got it right about Arlo. He was hiding in plain sight all those years. He did a good job of covering up his past. judi
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I had no problems with the length. I thought it all went together very nicely. I am surprised it was Arlo. I never suspected him. You did a very nice job writing this.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2021
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I had no problems with the length. I thought it all went together very nicely. I am surprised it was Arlo. I never suspected him. You did a very nice job writing this.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2021
Thanks so much for your review and special thanks for the super sixer. I'd never undertaken a mystery script before, and if I do anything with it in the future, it will need to be expanded. I appreciate your support through all this. I hope you're making some progress with your wrist. Let us know how you're doing. judi
Comment from lyenochka
Congratulations on finishing this ambitious project with your script of so many characters and a play within a play! I wasn't expecting a second murderer to be found but now it's good to know what happened all those years.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2021
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Congratulations on finishing this ambitious project with your script of so many characters and a play within a play! I wasn't expecting a second murderer to be found but now it's good to know what happened all those years.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2021
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Thanks for your review and words of congratulations. I'd need to do a lot more development if I got serious about seeing it produced. I had most fun with the play within the play. judi
Comment from Jay Squires
So Arlo the megalomaniac done the deed!? A good final act, Judi. I used to love going to the melodrama. I think if I were younger I'd have tried my hand at acting. Anyway, you handled the mystery element of a whodunnit quite well in the play format.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2021
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So Arlo the megalomaniac done the deed!? A good final act, Judi. I used to love going to the melodrama. I think if I were younger I'd have tried my hand at acting. Anyway, you handled the mystery element of a whodunnit quite well in the play format.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2021
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Thanks so much for your review and comments. I've been in the Crosley Radio Shows for several years. We perform classic radio shows like they were done during the days of radio. Of course, with the coronavirus we haven't done anything for over a year. judi
Comment from aryr
That was an incredible find that Lisa made. Who would have thought that the second murderer was Arlo? What a perfect way to end a script than catching a murderer and to have Marty hit him with the same candle stick that Arlo used on him. What is even better is that Marty found justice for his family. Great job and very much enjoyed.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2021
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That was an incredible find that Lisa made. Who would have thought that the second murderer was Arlo? What a perfect way to end a script than catching a murderer and to have Marty hit him with the same candle stick that Arlo used on him. What is even better is that Marty found justice for his family. Great job and very much enjoyed.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2021
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Thanks so much for your review and comments. I thought it would be fitting for Marty to tackle Arlo, as Arlo had murdered his family. I'm so glad you enjoyed. judi
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You are so welcome judi, I am so glad that Marty was able to bring down Arlo.
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Thanks again. I wanted Marty to be the one, as Arlo had killed his mother and brothers. judi
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Congrats on completion of this double twister! I'd been wondering why you needed another scene! This would work well in performance.
[He=>sugg: PATTERSON (for clarity)] was planning to write a book about the Branson murders, and he's naming Arlo as the murderer who got away.
broaches=>brooches
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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Congrats on completion of this double twister! I'd been wondering why you needed another scene! This would work well in performance.
[He=>sugg: PATTERSON (for clarity)] was planning to write a book about the Branson murders, and he's naming Arlo as the murderer who got away.
broaches=>brooches
Comment Written 08-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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Thanks so much for your review and comments. It's hard when you have so many characters. It was a challenge to keep them all busy when they were on stage at the same time. Thanks for the spelling reminder. judi
Comment from lancellot
I didn't notice the length. It moved quickly because of the mystery being solved and the action. I think you did a perfect job here. It felt just as one would expect a stage play to be like.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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I didn't notice the length. It moved quickly because of the mystery being solved and the action. I think you did a perfect job here. It felt just as one would expect a stage play to be like.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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Thanks so much for your review and encouraging words, as well as the super sixer. I complicated things with so many possible suspects and trying to manage the play within the play. Whew! I had a hard time trying to keep things straight. judi
