Comment from aryr

Excellent

This was indeed a fantastic continuation script, judiverse. This all ties the information together, Marty was hiding in a closet while his mother and brothers were killed. I really couldn't blame him for seeking information from Patterson. The suspense just keeps building. Great picture by the way. Very well done and greatly enjoyed.

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021

Thanks so much for your review and comments. Thanks for hanging in there and following the script. There will be a few more scenes before it wraps up. I have a hard time keeping up with all the developments, myself. judi

reply by aryr on 26-Oct-2021

You are most welcome, judi. I really enjoy this one.

reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021

Thanks again. I'm so glad you enjoyed. judi

Comment from Robert Zimmerman

Excellent

It appears with all the activities in the play plus all of the investigative activities outside the play, somebody appears to be trying to blame somebody else. Whenever one is a suspect, it takes a while to bob and weave through all the stories. Maybe Clay can arrest all of them, interrogate them, put them in a cell together, and figure out who did the deed.

Z

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021

Thanks a bunch for the review and comments. I appreciate you hanging in there, it's taking such a long time. Someone would probably get killed if they were all put in there together. judi

reply by Robert Zimmerman on 25-Oct-2021

You're welcome

Comment from Judy Lawless

Excellent

Lots of new information coming out, but nothing to point a finger yet. You are doing a good job of keeping us in suspense, Judi. Well done.

A couple of little spags:
"Let's see how far we can get before Matt Dillon and Chester get here(.) Arlo, do your introduction."
"I don't think I can help you any closer to solving Patterson's murder." - not sure what you meant here. Should it be help you GET any closer?

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021

Thanks so much for your review and comments. Thanks, too, for sticking in there with the script. It's taken a while and things are getting complicated. It'll be a few more scenes before I finish. judi

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I like it! The real killer is playing cat and mouse with them by leaving these notes. But in the process, we get to know a little bit more about one of the characters. This is good because the cast is so huge we can't keep track of them all but by showcasing one per scene, we can start differentiating between them now.

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021

Thanks for stocking with the script and your your thoughtful comments. It is tricky to manage a large cast. I was in a community theater production of "You Can't Take It With You," and it had a large cast. There were scenes when many of us were on stage at the same time. Everyone had to have something to say or do. Not an easy job for the director. judi

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Exceptional

I'm wondering what this note will tell us. You're doing a great job keeping the suspense level high. I am really enjoying reading. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021

Hi, Barbara. Thanks for your review and comments, and special thanks for the super sixer. judi

Comment from royowen

Exceptional

Both Clay and Lou are on the hunt and quickly discovering that some are withholding things that could influence the solving of the case, so they are telling folk that they are not happy with some, particularly Marty. Beautifully written Judy, a great job with the twists and turns in the plot. Well done, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021

Thanks for It'your review and comments. Special thanks for the super sixer. It's taking a long time to get everything in place, but it's a long script. Judi

reply by royowen on 24-Oct-2021

You?re doing well

Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

What a tangled web! I'm going to have to take this from the top to get my bearings--nothing deficient on your end, just a matter of losing the thread during the intervals between posts. This will be gripping in performance!

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021

Thanks so much for your review and comments. It would probably make more sense if I wasn't so slow in completing the scenes, but I always have other things I want to write. I think it would be fun to see the bits from the melodrama they're rehearsing. judi

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

More revelations come out. The plot thickens. This is moving like a good stage play.

notes:

(ARLO plays a bit of "There's No Place Like {Hone}.")

- Home.

Don: {(}As Banker Cooper) (He enters Left and is disheveled and bruised as if he has been in a fight.

-Remove: (

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021

Thanks so much for your review and comments. This is taking me forever, but I'm always sidetracked by writing other things. judi

Comment from Sherry Asbury

Excellent

You write a script well...something I envy and have not tried. The story flows well and I saw no flaws. It says you are the #2 in the rankings for scripts and you can't beat that. A very fine presentation.

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021

Thanks so much for your review and encouraging comments. It's worth giving scriptwriting a try. As you notice, there aren't too many in that category. Have a great weekend. judi