Comment from Giftedone.Eric Wallace .

Good

Very intense read please blow it up a little bit for me it was long but over all it was a pretty good job thank you for sharing this keep doing you and writing it shows

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 Comment Written 19-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2021

Obviously your preference is for short poems. Keep in mind, if you see a full length play it could be as long as two hours. Thanks for stopping by. judi

Comment from Carol Hillebrenner

Excellent

Your summary, description of scenes, and cast participants list are very good, making it easy to look back for reference purposes. The idea of a play within a play is very well done. This is a very publishable script. Good luck with it.

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021

Thanks for your review and comments, Carol. In one scene, I had the actors rehearsing a scene from the melodrama they will (hopefully) be performing if the cast members aren't killed off first. judi

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

Good act, you gave the readers much need information. The mystery continues.

notes:

She puts the tray back on the table and sits down.[)]

-add


Gale: (Let's begin with where we left off last night.

- remove that (

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2021

Thanks for your review and comments. A few more scenes to go before we learn everyone's secrets. I appreciate you for handing in with the script. judi

Comment from Judy Lawless

Excellent

Another interesting scene, judi. It seems there are no real answers, only speculations so far.

A couple of things you might want to look at:
"(ARLO is playing the piano and {LISA is passing sandwiches.} MADGE is still seated on the sofa, with CORINNE beside her. {LISA is passing the tray with sandwiches around."} - you've mentioned that Lisa is passing out sandwiches" twice in here.

"someone who just blend(s) in right here in Bellfield."

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021

Hi, Judy, and thanks much for your review and comments. I'm so glad you're following the script. There will be more scenes before we discover who the actual murderer is. judi

Comment from Robert Zimmerman

Excellent

Judi.

What we learn from this is if you plan to put a confession in your pocket on a piece of paper, don't put it in the same pocket with a handkerchief, in case you sneeze. Everybody has become a detective so I'm sure that before it is over, everyone will be a suspect.

Robert

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021

Thanks so much for your review and comments. Yes, everyone is offering up their opinion. More reveals to come before we find out who's the murderer. judi

reply by Robert Zimmerman on 16-Oct-2021

You're welcome

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

This is an excellent script. It seems at some point almost everyone is coming under suspiction. I'm wondering what happened to the third son who hid when his Mother and brothers were murdered. If the murder was only ten years ago, almost everyone int this group would be too old to be that person.

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021

Thanks for your review and comments. I have the answer to what happened to him, but I'm not telling. Have a great Sunday. I appreciate you for stopping by. judi

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

This is most intriguing! I am a little suspicious of Gale as she has motive and she's so quick to change the subject back to rehearsal when there has been a breakthrough in solving one of the cases - either the past one or the current one.

I like how you keep Arlo as the "class clown." Maybe he's the killer?

Question. Wasn't sure who this referred to:
other man was wearing when he was shot. (who was shot?)

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021

Thanks so much for your review and comments. You're getting mighty suspicious. Still a few more scenes to go. Sorry you weren't clear about that Wes Danton was the man who was shot and killed in a shoot out with the police. I should have mentioned his name, and I'll go back and do that. judi

Comment from aryr

Excellent

Wow, the suspense keeps growing, judiverse. It was a great continuation script. You presented the possibilities and the officers took the reins. Very well done and greatly enjoyed.

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021

Thanks so much for your review and comments. It'll take a few more scenes before we find out who did it. I appreciate you for following the script. judi

reply by aryr on 16-Oct-2021

You are so welcome judi.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

What a complex and interesting plot, we seem to have narrowed it down a little, the mysterious third member of the family, like in some of those English murder/mysteries could well be disguised among them. Beautifully written dear Judy, blessings Roy
Typo : someone who just blend((ed) in...

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021

Thanks for your review and comments. I'm afraid the killer is among those present at the rehearsals. It'll take a few more scenes before everything becomes clear. judi

reply by royowen on 16-Oct-2021

Well done

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This Chapter, Act 2, Part 1 of the Scene of melodrama murder speaks about Don reveals his reason for moving to Bellfield, the drama is well expressed like te dialogues realistic put in a nice and appropriate setting; Well said, well done; thank you for this, happy to review this; God Bless you, my dear good writer, wish read more. ALCREATOR, October, Festive Month

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 15-Oct-2021

Thanks so much for your review and comments. I appreciate you for stopping by. judi