A wand'ring wail
A poem45 total reviews
Comment from country ranch writer
Nice presentation to try to explain to folks things and workings of the world around us. I think one has to believe in ones self in order to believe in ones self before we can believe in others. We all bed something or someone to believe in and guide us through life. As for our children they live and learn some learn the hard way to have faith and hope.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2021
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Nice presentation to try to explain to folks things and workings of the world around us. I think one has to believe in ones self in order to believe in ones self before we can believe in others. We all bed something or someone to believe in and guide us through life. As for our children they live and learn some learn the hard way to have faith and hope.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2021
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Thanks for these uplifting comments and a great review, blessings Roy
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Comment from robyn corum
Roy,
Hey! Another Roy-boy masterpiece! Nice - we don't see too many of these lately. I always appreciate looking into that big brain of yours. *smile* As always, you share smart observations on this world - both the physical and spiritual ones AND some clever thoughts on how to move through both of them better. You are a good and kind man. Thank you.
I do love it though when I think I've found something to pick at in your posts - because that's always so rare! hahahaha Below are a couple of notes - yours to use or toss, as you like.
1.) that (take) a ride on frosty gales.
--> thoughts take
2.) Yet (heed) the mind of one who knows
--> thoughts heed
3.) And yet my soul's confined - it roams,
--> hmmm... just checking
--> 'confined' and 'roaming' seem contradictory?
4.) I'd rather dwell in restful peace,
than travel roads where vultures feast.
--> Me, too!!!
5.) It seemed a little weird to me that all of your stanzas were four lines except that one in the middle - it seemed like an accident. I wanted to show you a couple of ideas you might consider - only thoughts to make things look more intentional -- you have 26 lines. A weird number to work with, which is why, I'm sure, you ended up formatting the poem like you did. Alternatives:
--> 2/6/2/6/2/6/2/6 -- (four sets of 2/6) -or:
--> 6/4/6/4/6
Just some ideas. Nothing earthshattering. And nothing to take away from your beautiful and thought-provoking message. Thanks!
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2021
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Roy,
Hey! Another Roy-boy masterpiece! Nice - we don't see too many of these lately. I always appreciate looking into that big brain of yours. *smile* As always, you share smart observations on this world - both the physical and spiritual ones AND some clever thoughts on how to move through both of them better. You are a good and kind man. Thank you.
I do love it though when I think I've found something to pick at in your posts - because that's always so rare! hahahaha Below are a couple of notes - yours to use or toss, as you like.
1.) that (take) a ride on frosty gales.
--> thoughts take
2.) Yet (heed) the mind of one who knows
--> thoughts heed
3.) And yet my soul's confined - it roams,
--> hmmm... just checking
--> 'confined' and 'roaming' seem contradictory?
4.) I'd rather dwell in restful peace,
than travel roads where vultures feast.
--> Me, too!!!
5.) It seemed a little weird to me that all of your stanzas were four lines except that one in the middle - it seemed like an accident. I wanted to show you a couple of ideas you might consider - only thoughts to make things look more intentional -- you have 26 lines. A weird number to work with, which is why, I'm sure, you ended up formatting the poem like you did. Alternatives:
--> 2/6/2/6/2/6/2/6 -- (four sets of 2/6) -or:
--> 6/4/6/4/6
Just some ideas. Nothing earthshattering. And nothing to take away from your beautiful and thought-provoking message. Thanks!
Comment Written 28-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2021
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Thanks so much for your genuinely helpful, observations Robyn, you?ve got a smart mind, blessings Roy
Comment from Eunice Amero
You have a good poem here. Its true we were born to love abd believe God. Serve Him and love our fellow man. Thank you for sharing this nice poem. Good luck and keep writing
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2021
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You have a good poem here. Its true we were born to love abd believe God. Serve Him and love our fellow man. Thank you for sharing this nice poem. Good luck and keep writing
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2021
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Thanks so much Eunice, for this marvellous comments and a great review, blessings Roy
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you are more than welcome
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
A wand'ring wail
by royowen
A thought provoking poem about what we think we want instead of what we need.
The rhymes do not seem forced. Your poem flows well. It draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2021
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A wand'ring wail
by royowen
A thought provoking poem about what we think we want instead of what we need.
The rhymes do not seem forced. Your poem flows well. It draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2021
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Thanks so much Gypsy, for this marvellous comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Gloria ....
A superb poem illustrating your unshakeable faith, and what it means to you as you gently through a series of fine imagery lead us to your rightful place "I'll serve my Lord where servants kneel.
A most uplifting read today, and I thank you for sharing. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2021
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A superb poem illustrating your unshakeable faith, and what it means to you as you gently through a series of fine imagery lead us to your rightful place "I'll serve my Lord where servants kneel.
A most uplifting read today, and I thank you for sharing. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2021
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Thanks so much Gloria, for this marvellous comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from dragonpoet
Roy,
This is a pensive piece about whether we really know what we want or need in life. It seems some of us question faith and some live by it. It has easy rhyme and nice flow even with the different length of stanzas.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2021
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Roy,
This is a pensive piece about whether we really know what we want or need in life. It seems some of us question faith and some live by it. It has easy rhyme and nice flow even with the different length of stanzas.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2021
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Thanks so much Joan, for this marvellous comments and a great review, blessings Roy
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You are most kindly welcome, Roy.
Joan
Comment from Kamrynn June
Good evening, Royowen!
Ok so. You have two lines in here that clutched on and captured me. 'I try to reach beyond dust's thought'-WOW. This is just a concept that I would never have thought of. Crazy how different minds work.
'Where giants nest and rag-dreams rove Just imagining giants nesting is so magical and terrifying at the same time:) You could build on that a lot!
All the best,
-K.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2021
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Good evening, Royowen!
Ok so. You have two lines in here that clutched on and captured me. 'I try to reach beyond dust's thought'-WOW. This is just a concept that I would never have thought of. Crazy how different minds work.
'Where giants nest and rag-dreams rove Just imagining giants nesting is so magical and terrifying at the same time:) You could build on that a lot!
All the best,
-K.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2021
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Thanks so much Kamryn, for this marvellous comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from jlsavell
Roy, good evening,
Your poem is beautifully written and the narrator, as is any humble man, seeks the answers of life's why but yet, finds the peace and solitude in their unwavering faith.
Lately there have been many writings on the subject of religion and belief in God. It appears to be more so lately than in past times. The essays and poems usually consist of two extremes: those who have a firm unwavering belief in God, and/ or, a Creator and those who question God's existence. I am sure you will concur that when both sides of the coin express their belief in a logical and respectful manner, we, as Fanstorian readers and reviewers, are most willing to appreciate their belief, regardless of our own.
After reading many of these works, I have surmised that despite the differences, there is one commonality among them that is truly a affirmation of mankind's need to discover life's meaning, its purpose, and just as important, how did life arrive.
In your poetic style you have encompassed what having faith in God means to you in this journey of life.
If you or I were to ask anyone about their dreams of enjoying a better life, I would wager that their reply would consist of at least one, if not all, of the following: a more secure financial future, more time with family, enough hours in the day to do fulfilling activities, travel the world, retire without a worry, perhaps move to a tropical paradise, and one that I am confident we all hope for, the continued good health and well being of ourselves, our family, and our friends.
Paul Gauguin, a renowned French artist of the nineteenth century, who had suffered disease and chronic depression from his dissolute past, wanted to find the dream of enjoying a better life. In 1891, at the age of forty three, he journeyed to French Polynesia in hopes of discovering such a desire. Reality soon set in, for Paul found himself still struggling with health issues, unrelenting depression, the death of two of his children and time in prison. As he felt death approaching, he painted what has been described as a "final affirmation of artistic force." On the book Paul Gauguin 1849-1903,The Primitive Sophisticate say, "The spectrum of human activity encompassed by the painting all spans of life, from birth to death. Paul Gauguin was interpreting life as a great mystery."
Gauguin named that painting, "Where Do We Come From? What Are We? Where Are We Going?"
It does not take any one kind of man to ask such a question. In fact, such a preponderance of thought is most familiar. Among the human family, it is asked every day and every minute. After noting man's scientific and technical advances, an editor of The Wall Street Journal wrote, "In contemplation of man himself, of his dilemmas, of his place in the universe, we are little further along than when time began. We are still left with questions of who we are and why we are and where we are going."
In light of the human experience it is of little wonder why many of us question the existence of God, especially a loving one. It is also just as understandable how many grasp and hold on to the belief that there is a God who cares.
Every minute of any given day, there is untold suffering around the globe. We all observe poverty, disease, and injustice right in our own backyards. Why? Brutal wars destroy the world's innocent. Herculean natural catastrophes reap unfathomable destruction on property and life. Greed consumes and devastates families and nations. It is inevitable that mankind asks if there is real meaning to life and if there is a God, does he really care.
It is interesting to note that this question has been posed by many men for centuries. The Biblical character Job, who was described as having the utmost faith in God, asked why do we suffer, why is the world unjust, what is the purpose of pain and tragedy?
Over the centuries, many have sought this answer through religion. After Gautama (Buddha) was exposed to the sight of a sick man, an old man, and a dead man, he sought enlightenment, or meaning, in religion but without a personal belief in God. Others have turned to their church. Still others have sought answers elsewhere and still others seek to solidify their disbelief in God by actively reading and dissecting the very book which for centuries has declared its origins from God, The Holy Bible.
While skepticism about the existence of a Creator abounds, is it justified?
In the 18th century, the philosopher David Hume stood fast in not accepting the existence of a creator, but yet could offer no explanation for the complex biological design on Earth. Darwin's theory proposed how life-forms developed, but it could not explain how life began or what meaning it has for it.
Well Roy, again I often go around the block with thoughts a poem evokes in me. Often off the beaten track. However, nonetheless, your poem clearly demonstrates a man with a humble heart who knows what he knows because of his faith and carries forward in spite of the force of opposing tides.
Beautiful
Have a great day,
Jimi
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2021
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Roy, good evening,
Your poem is beautifully written and the narrator, as is any humble man, seeks the answers of life's why but yet, finds the peace and solitude in their unwavering faith.
Lately there have been many writings on the subject of religion and belief in God. It appears to be more so lately than in past times. The essays and poems usually consist of two extremes: those who have a firm unwavering belief in God, and/ or, a Creator and those who question God's existence. I am sure you will concur that when both sides of the coin express their belief in a logical and respectful manner, we, as Fanstorian readers and reviewers, are most willing to appreciate their belief, regardless of our own.
After reading many of these works, I have surmised that despite the differences, there is one commonality among them that is truly a affirmation of mankind's need to discover life's meaning, its purpose, and just as important, how did life arrive.
In your poetic style you have encompassed what having faith in God means to you in this journey of life.
If you or I were to ask anyone about their dreams of enjoying a better life, I would wager that their reply would consist of at least one, if not all, of the following: a more secure financial future, more time with family, enough hours in the day to do fulfilling activities, travel the world, retire without a worry, perhaps move to a tropical paradise, and one that I am confident we all hope for, the continued good health and well being of ourselves, our family, and our friends.
Paul Gauguin, a renowned French artist of the nineteenth century, who had suffered disease and chronic depression from his dissolute past, wanted to find the dream of enjoying a better life. In 1891, at the age of forty three, he journeyed to French Polynesia in hopes of discovering such a desire. Reality soon set in, for Paul found himself still struggling with health issues, unrelenting depression, the death of two of his children and time in prison. As he felt death approaching, he painted what has been described as a "final affirmation of artistic force." On the book Paul Gauguin 1849-1903,The Primitive Sophisticate say, "The spectrum of human activity encompassed by the painting all spans of life, from birth to death. Paul Gauguin was interpreting life as a great mystery."
Gauguin named that painting, "Where Do We Come From? What Are We? Where Are We Going?"
It does not take any one kind of man to ask such a question. In fact, such a preponderance of thought is most familiar. Among the human family, it is asked every day and every minute. After noting man's scientific and technical advances, an editor of The Wall Street Journal wrote, "In contemplation of man himself, of his dilemmas, of his place in the universe, we are little further along than when time began. We are still left with questions of who we are and why we are and where we are going."
In light of the human experience it is of little wonder why many of us question the existence of God, especially a loving one. It is also just as understandable how many grasp and hold on to the belief that there is a God who cares.
Every minute of any given day, there is untold suffering around the globe. We all observe poverty, disease, and injustice right in our own backyards. Why? Brutal wars destroy the world's innocent. Herculean natural catastrophes reap unfathomable destruction on property and life. Greed consumes and devastates families and nations. It is inevitable that mankind asks if there is real meaning to life and if there is a God, does he really care.
It is interesting to note that this question has been posed by many men for centuries. The Biblical character Job, who was described as having the utmost faith in God, asked why do we suffer, why is the world unjust, what is the purpose of pain and tragedy?
Over the centuries, many have sought this answer through religion. After Gautama (Buddha) was exposed to the sight of a sick man, an old man, and a dead man, he sought enlightenment, or meaning, in religion but without a personal belief in God. Others have turned to their church. Still others have sought answers elsewhere and still others seek to solidify their disbelief in God by actively reading and dissecting the very book which for centuries has declared its origins from God, The Holy Bible.
While skepticism about the existence of a Creator abounds, is it justified?
In the 18th century, the philosopher David Hume stood fast in not accepting the existence of a creator, but yet could offer no explanation for the complex biological design on Earth. Darwin's theory proposed how life-forms developed, but it could not explain how life began or what meaning it has for it.
Well Roy, again I often go around the block with thoughts a poem evokes in me. Often off the beaten track. However, nonetheless, your poem clearly demonstrates a man with a humble heart who knows what he knows because of his faith and carries forward in spite of the force of opposing tides.
Beautiful
Have a great day,
Jimi
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2021
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I think this the best and most comprehensive review I?ve ever read. You?ve nailed the very essence of the poem?s thrust Jimi, it?s presenting the gospel as a challenge to folk, we are such an arrogant lot, whereas God through Jesus humbles Himself through a humble birth, a debilitating shame filled death, our shame, what do men expect of God, a million bucks? Thank you dear girl, awesome review, blessings Roy
Comment from scongrove
Another beautiful post my friend :)
I wish everyone could realize this. God gave his son for our sins. That is a sacrifice not many could do. It is proof of how much he loves his children.
This is my favorite part:
One may as well chase endless schemes,
where death in silent darkness beams.
I'll serve my Lord where servants kneel
where hope's secure in truth's bright seal.
Thanks for sharing your inspiring words.
Always your fan,
Shana :)
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2021
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Another beautiful post my friend :)
I wish everyone could realize this. God gave his son for our sins. That is a sacrifice not many could do. It is proof of how much he loves his children.
This is my favorite part:
One may as well chase endless schemes,
where death in silent darkness beams.
I'll serve my Lord where servants kneel
where hope's secure in truth's bright seal.
Thanks for sharing your inspiring words.
Always your fan,
Shana :)
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2021
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Thanks again dear Shana. My greatest fan, and I?m yours, bless you Roy
Comment from Pearl Edwards
You really were in a contemplative mood Roy when writing this one. I like to read these thought provoking poems, wondering if there's more, what does it all mean. I felt Tony was standing by my bed this morning, that makes me feel protected too. Nice one Roy. Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2021
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You really were in a contemplative mood Roy when writing this one. I like to read these thought provoking poems, wondering if there's more, what does it all mean. I felt Tony was standing by my bed this morning, that makes me feel protected too. Nice one Roy. Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2021
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Thanks so much Valda, for this marvellous comments and a great review, blessings Roy