Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

You play is getting very exciting. I like that we are getting some of the script for the performance as well. It seems like a typical rehearsal. I thought the thunder and lightning were a part of the play but then realized they were really happening. I don't know why poor Madge would be targeted. I can't wait to find out

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021

Thanks so much for your review and comments. We'll see what happens to Madge. She seems like an innocent person. But who knows? I'm glad you enjoyed the bit of the melodrama that I included. I didn't want to overdo it. judi

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Oh no! It seems that the killer is among them and he/she has bad aim if only the arm is injured.
This is quite the challenge as you have each character having their own name plus the name of the part they ply.

One typo:
IARLO plays the villain's theme (ARLO)

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021

Thanks for your review and comments. I'm having a hard time juggling all the characters. I'm glad you're following the script. judi

Comment from Robert Zimmerman

Excellent

Hello Judi.

Ask the play resumes rehearsals, the lights go out and another person is stabbed. Stabbing someone in the arm seems a little unusual but the lights are out.

That certainly doesn't mean whoever committed the original murder is guilty here. There are lots of possibilities as to who and why that could have occurred at rehearsal.

It certainly is a bit of a twist and an elevation in tension.

Robert

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021

Thanks so much for your review and comments. There is a lot of mischief afoot! judi

reply by Robert Zimmerman on 09-Sep-2021

You're welcome.

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Judi,

Oh, my! BUT - sounds contrived... the ARM??? hmmm.. She could have done that herself, couldn't she? Since the other guy was killed DEAD and she is only wounded. This could be an attempt to divert attention. OR it could be a real moment by the real bad guy. We just have no way of knowing yet! Very tricky! Very tricky!

Nicely done, author!

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021

Thanks so much for your review and comments. You've got a point. I don't think the intention was to murder Madge. Who knows what will happen before it all unfolds? (I don't.) judi

Comment from aryr

Excellent

A great continuation of the script, judiverse. I really love the suspense of this continuing melodrama. The cast portrays suspense on each character. No one really knows what will happen next. Poor Madge with her knife wound to the arm. Great job.

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021

Thanks so much for reading. The is a long process. I have quite a time keeping everything straight myself. I'll have to make a chart to keep track of the characters and their alibis and motivations. judi

reply by aryr on 09-Sep-2021

LOL, I can only imagine the process, judiverse. You are most welcome and so very brave.

reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021

I'm going to have to make a chart so I can keep track of everything. judi

Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

Point taken as to the melodrama--adds to the charm of this scene within the scene. Dialog flows well--startling twist with a real stabbing. I have no clue!

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021

Thanks so much for your review and comments. I am thinking of giving up the project for lack of reviews. judi

reply by Elizabeth Emerald on 09-Sep-2021

That sucks! I can't fathom why people are loath to read scripts--you have to pump sky high. Do you have the rest written yet?

reply by Elizabeth Emerald on 09-Sep-2021

That sucks! I can't fathom why people are loath to read scripts--you have to pump sky high. Do you have the rest written yet?

reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021

I have to confess I haven't written the rest. It's still playing around in my head. judi

Comment from Judy Lawless

Excellent

You're doing a great job of building the suspense in this judi. It's going to be hard to figure out who the murderer is, I think. Well done.

A couple of things: "so hurry and put yours own(on)."

I'm not sure what you want to say here. "During the following(?) sounds of thunder and lightning flashes begin.)

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2021

Thanks for your review and comments. Sometimes I'm not sure myself what's going on. There will be a lot more developments to come. By "During the following" I meant the scene that they went through. Do you think it would clarify if if I said "During the following scene from the melodrama"? judi

reply by Judy Lawless on 07-Sep-2021

Yes, I think that would help, judi

reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021

Thanks for the input. judi

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Another drama is added to what's going, although they know the cops are on the job, they also know there is a murderer at large, and who knows who it is, it seems Madge has been stabbed in the arm. Great post Judy, blessings Roy
Typo : Hurry and put yours (own) on?

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2021

Thanks so much for your review and comments. I even have myself perplexed about who the murderer is. judi

reply by royowen on 07-Sep-2021

Heh heh I like that, someone will emerge I?m sure

reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021

Oh, yes. I have someone in mind.

reply by royowen on 08-Sep-2021

Good job

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

Well, things are heating up. With the light going out, I wonder if that was the storm or did someone cut the power. Madge only got stabbed in the arm. Strange. And with more cops coming, no way they all stay there.

You'll have to wash out the roads.

Good stuff.

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2021

Thanks so much for your review and comments. I didn't specify the cause of the power outage, but it is probably just caused by the storm. It doesn't seem like the others were far enough from the stage to do that. judi

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Another accident. This can't be good. I am really beginning to like this skit more each time I read. You're doing a great job. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2021

Thanks for your review, and thanks a bunch for those supportive comments. judi