Comment from Lamittan Minsah

Needs Improvement

This is a great poem, especially if it'd be reworked so that the reader mustn't wait for the writer's explanation at the end to understand the poem, if the Punctuation marks are used correctly as they should (remember, each punctuation mark has a meaning and ultimately an impact in a poem), if the diction is 'unconfounding' and, finally, if the writer chooses one format, either metered-verse or free-verse poetry. The idea behind the poem, as pointed out by the writer is, notwithstanding, good and worth a better take.

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021

Well I truly appreciate your recommendations and hope in the future when you do begin to share that I can review your work and help you.
Doctor Ricky 1024
"Still Preaching the Choir Here at Fanstory"

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

You have a strong steady beat in your words. "But still a miracle can come true" are my favorite lines that show how life can become better. Excellent theme for poetry that many can relate to.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2021

Occasionally, I will go through my past works.
Yes, and look for something notable?
Something, something that I can do a rewrite.
And put on the internet such as this one.
Thanks for reading this and have a blessed week!
Ricky