Smooth Talker Hightails it
Conning the cops: three stops in one wild night40 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
The readers will be exhausted after following these escapades. There are vicarious and e
visceral experiences to take advantage of in this account. The main character is portrayed as clever but I wonder if we would really want a friend who constantly fabricated. This would be a good topic to discuss. This work is clever. Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2021
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The readers will be exhausted after following these escapades. There are vicarious and e
visceral experiences to take advantage of in this account. The main character is portrayed as clever but I wonder if we would really want a friend who constantly fabricated. This would be a good topic to discuss. This work is clever. Well done.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2021
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Thank you! I assume you're reading tw-penny contest entries--I appreciate your diligence. Stop by anytime--hopefully, you'll get better pay in future.
Three times in one night is true--details are fabricated/elaborated--the cooked-up ruse is the last part went down as written!
Comment from Mabaker12
Very well written and this made me laugh. I've been the designated driver on a few occasions and sometimes it turns out funny and sometimes it turns the police are searching for one very sodden party-goer who has wandered off and found a snug, and gone to sleep. Well done
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2021
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Very well written and this made me laugh. I've been the designated driver on a few occasions and sometimes it turns out funny and sometimes it turns the police are searching for one very sodden party-goer who has wandered off and found a snug, and gone to sleep. Well done
Comment Written 03-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2021
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Thank you! I assume you're reading tw-penny contest entries--I appreciate your diligence. Stop by anytime--hopefully, you'll get better pay in future.
Three times in one night is true--details are fabricated/elaborated--the cooked-up ruse is the last part went down as written!
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You are very welcome
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Funny story told very well. Chuck was quite inventive and survived an experience I had a few times myself (which will never appear in print anywhere. I enjoyed your way of writing it a lot.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Funny story told very well. Chuck was quite inventive and survived an experience I had a few times myself (which will never appear in print anywhere. I enjoyed your way of writing it a lot.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Thank you! Always a pleasure--stop by anytime.
Three times in one night is true--details are fabricated/elaborated--the cooked-up ruse is the last part went down as written!
Comment from JennStar
First off I think this was an interesting very short story. That being said I think this would be great if it was flushed out into a longer story and given more descriptive details. An example would be if you got more physical description of how the manager looked chasing the guys out of the store. Another point was at the end how are the friends going nuts; what are they screaming, how do they look, are they making funny faces or hand gestures.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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First off I think this was an interesting very short story. That being said I think this would be great if it was flushed out into a longer story and given more descriptive details. An example would be if you got more physical description of how the manager looked chasing the guys out of the store. Another point was at the end how are the friends going nuts; what are they screaming, how do they look, are they making funny faces or hand gestures.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Thank you! Point taken as regards description. I was afraid the story was already too long. One of my fans--spent 36 pumps on this to promote to top spot @ 1.27 !!! notwithstanding which it got more skips than reads.
Three times in one night is true--details are fabricated/elaborated--the cooked-up ruse is the last part went down as written!
Always a pleasure--stop by anytime.
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Everybody is so different a lot of people like the extremely short stories but often if I like them I am sad cause I want more... I will be happy to read more of your work in the future love your sense of humor.
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THANK YOU JENN! I post daily--usually twice. Have at it!
Comment from equestrik
This is quite an adventure for sure! It's like one of those-'you couldn't make this one up' stories 'cause no one would believe it. Well told and a fun read.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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This is quite an adventure for sure! It's like one of those-'you couldn't make this one up' stories 'cause no one would believe it. Well told and a fun read.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Three times in one night is true--details are fabricated/elaborated--the cooked-up ruse is the last part went down as written!
Always a pleasure--stop by anytime.
Comment from Ulla
Hahahaha, Elizabeth, I liked this story. Had it not been for that cop who corporated it would all have ended rather badly for the three young lads. I also like it took place on the Cape, but that is more for sentimental reasons. My family, on my father's side, do hail from there, after all. All the way back to the Mayfair. But that's a by de by. I loved the story. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Hahahaha, Elizabeth, I liked this story. Had it not been for that cop who corporated it would all have ended rather badly for the three young lads. I also like it took place on the Cape, but that is more for sentimental reasons. My family, on my father's side, do hail from there, after all. All the way back to the Mayfair. But that's a by de by. I loved the story. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Three times in one night is true--details are fabricated/elaborated--the cooked-up ruse is the last part went down as written!
Always a pleasure--stop by anytime.
Comment from Father Flaps
That's crazy stuff, Liz. Chuck must have been at least 16 to be able to drive a car. In the summer of 1964, I was 13 years old and still glued to my bicycle.
Chuck and his buddies were lucky they didn't end up in jail. How fortunate to run into three lenient cops in the same night! Jimmy was loaded, and causing trouble in every town... Falmouth, Dennis, Harwich. And poor Chuckie had to compose stories that were totally unbelievable. If I had been Chuck, I wouldn't have told them the difference. I would have let the boys sweat with worry... escapees from the law! I can just picture them gawking out the rear window for red lights and sirens.
A terrific blast into the past! Loved it. The closest I came to that was one night, driving through the village of Westfield. My best friend, Jim, was driving his car, a 1967 Ford Falcon Sports Coupe... gorgeous car... forest green with a half black vinyl roof and black leather interior, 289 high performance engine, 4-speed standard stick shift, 4-barrell carb, sway bars, and a glorious stereo system that played nothing but Gordon Lightfoot 8-tracks. It would have been around 1971, I think. We had an open case of Alpine beer beside me in the back seat, Jim and Greg up front. And here comes the RCMP (Royal Canadian Mounted Police) behind us, red lights flashing. Well, Jim tells me to throw the beer out the window. ...What???
"I'm not going to stop the car until you have thrown every bottle of beer out the freaking window!" ... (of course, he didn't say "freaking")
So there I go, tossing out these brown bottles of suds into the roadside ditch. All finished, Jim pulls over with the policeman right behind. The constable shines his flashlight along the ditch... "Are these bottles of beer yours?" And, of course, we lied through our teeth. "Nope!"
Oh my, that was an experience I'll never forget... lying to a cop! But what could he do? He let us go. We weren't speeding. And there were no breathalyzers back then. He knew we were lying, and he also knew we were smart... stupid smart!
Nicely penned, Liz! I enjoyed it.
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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That's crazy stuff, Liz. Chuck must have been at least 16 to be able to drive a car. In the summer of 1964, I was 13 years old and still glued to my bicycle.
Chuck and his buddies were lucky they didn't end up in jail. How fortunate to run into three lenient cops in the same night! Jimmy was loaded, and causing trouble in every town... Falmouth, Dennis, Harwich. And poor Chuckie had to compose stories that were totally unbelievable. If I had been Chuck, I wouldn't have told them the difference. I would have let the boys sweat with worry... escapees from the law! I can just picture them gawking out the rear window for red lights and sirens.
A terrific blast into the past! Loved it. The closest I came to that was one night, driving through the village of Westfield. My best friend, Jim, was driving his car, a 1967 Ford Falcon Sports Coupe... gorgeous car... forest green with a half black vinyl roof and black leather interior, 289 high performance engine, 4-speed standard stick shift, 4-barrell carb, sway bars, and a glorious stereo system that played nothing but Gordon Lightfoot 8-tracks. It would have been around 1971, I think. We had an open case of Alpine beer beside me in the back seat, Jim and Greg up front. And here comes the RCMP (Royal Canadian Mounted Police) behind us, red lights flashing. Well, Jim tells me to throw the beer out the window. ...What???
"I'm not going to stop the car until you have thrown every bottle of beer out the freaking window!" ... (of course, he didn't say "freaking")
So there I go, tossing out these brown bottles of suds into the roadside ditch. All finished, Jim pulls over with the policeman right behind. The constable shines his flashlight along the ditch... "Are these bottles of beer yours?" And, of course, we lied through our teeth. "Nope!"
Oh my, that was an experience I'll never forget... lying to a cop! But what could he do? He let us go. We weren't speeding. And there were no breathalyzers back then. He knew we were lying, and he also knew we were smart... stupid smart!
Nicely penned, Liz! I enjoyed it.
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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POST YOUR STORY! Funny that you had a Jim and Greg also.
Three times in one night is true--details are fabricated/elaborated--the cooked-up ruse is the last part went down as written!
Always a pleasure--stop by anytime.
Comment from lancellot
An interesting humor tale. It is well written fiction from beginning to end with nice changes in location as the antics get more wild with each new police encounter. It reminds me of the classic SNL skits, back when they were good.
Well done.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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An interesting humor tale. It is well written fiction from beginning to end with nice changes in location as the antics get more wild with each new police encounter. It reminds me of the classic SNL skits, back when they were good.
Well done.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Thank you!
Three times in one night is true--details are fabricated/elaborated--the cooked-up ruse is the last part went down as written!
Comment from kmoss
Haha. Another funny story. It literally reminds me of the show on Netflix The Trailer Park Boys. I know what you're thinking, but the first few episodes suck but then it's gold. I swear. Lol. Wtf am I saying? It's SATURDAY.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Haha. Another funny story. It literally reminds me of the show on Netflix The Trailer Park Boys. I know what you're thinking, but the first few episodes suck but then it's gold. I swear. Lol. Wtf am I saying? It's SATURDAY.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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THANKSSSSSS!
Three times in one night is true--details are fabricated/elaborated--the cooked-up ruse is the last part went down as written!
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
So Chuck has all the moves. He is your 'Johnny On the Spot' no matter what. Those were very tall tales he told but with a flair. He is the man when it comes to talking.
Ralf
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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So Chuck has all the moves. He is your 'Johnny On the Spot' no matter what. Those were very tall tales he told but with a flair. He is the man when it comes to talking.
Ralf
Comment Written 10-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
Three times in one night is true--details are fabricated/elaborated--the cooked-up ruse is the last part went down as written!