NaPoWriMo 2021
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "22. Selfishness"NaPoWriMo 2021 Poetry Challenge
13 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Ha ha ha, a clever rhyming poem with a selfish message and there are too many people who think like this in the world Debra, I loved the flow here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021
Ha ha ha, a clever rhyming poem with a selfish message and there are too many people who think like this in the world Debra, I loved the flow here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 26-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021
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Thanks so much, Dolly :) Glad you enjoyed this little poem. Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from dragonpoet
Debra,
This abcb quatrain defines selfishness well in poetic form. I like the artwork that shows the fault as a superhero which the one who is selfish most probably feels him/hereselt to be.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
Debra,
This abcb quatrain defines selfishness well in poetic form. I like the artwork that shows the fault as a superhero which the one who is selfish most probably feels him/hereselt to be.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 26-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Joan, for your feedback, I appreciate it :)
Best wishes, Debra
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No problem, Debra.
Joan
Comment from Sharon Davis
This short rhymed poem delivers a short sharp message. The artwork accompanying the piece mirrors the tone and theme very effectively. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
This short rhymed poem delivers a short sharp message. The artwork accompanying the piece mirrors the tone and theme very effectively. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Sharon, for your feedback :)
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Great artwork and
nice presentation, Debra.
-You wrote a very good
poem with effective imagery
and rhyme.
-I like the attitude that is
expressed about this
"selfish Jack" and exactly
what he can do!!!
-Not too many more to go-
continued success with the project.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
-Great artwork and
nice presentation, Debra.
-You wrote a very good
poem with effective imagery
and rhyme.
-I like the attitude that is
expressed about this
"selfish Jack" and exactly
what he can do!!!
-Not too many more to go-
continued success with the project.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Thank you for your lovely feedback, Pam :)
Best wishes as always, Debra
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You are welcome, Debra.
Comment from Gloria ....
I really like the artwork. In this case the capital S doesn't stand for Superman, it stands for Selfish.
This is a fun peppy verse that says all that needs to be said.
Excellent contribution to your NaPo project. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
I really like the artwork. In this case the capital S doesn't stand for Superman, it stands for Selfish.
This is a fun peppy verse that says all that needs to be said.
Excellent contribution to your NaPo project. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 25-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Gloria, for your lovely feedback.
Best wishes as always, Debra :)
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Selfishness
by Debra White
Hello, Debra,
I like your short rhymed poem about selfishness. You describe what is like to be selfish well. I like your presentation too. Well done!
Cheers
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
Selfishness
by Debra White
Hello, Debra,
I like your short rhymed poem about selfishness. You describe what is like to be selfish well. I like your presentation too. Well done!
Cheers
Comment Written 25-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Gypsy, for your lovely feedback.
Best wishes as always, Debra :)
Comment from Sherry Asbury
He looks loveable and squeezable...but I have met him many times and he is ugly in his self-involvement. Very cute and clever, if we give him a wide berth. I like this very much!
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
He looks loveable and squeezable...but I have met him many times and he is ugly in his self-involvement. Very cute and clever, if we give him a wide berth. I like this very much!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Thanks so much, Sherry :)
Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Selfishness, identifies the egocentric person as one who was born under the sign --One Way. All take and no give makes the subject of this poem selfish.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
This poem, Selfishness, identifies the egocentric person as one who was born under the sign --One Way. All take and no give makes the subject of this poem selfish.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Bill, for your feedback.
Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
You nailed selfishness--witty bit of snark--great expression--hadn't heard it, got it from context, thought perhaps you'd coined it. Reference appreciated!
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
You nailed selfishness--witty bit of snark--great expression--hadn't heard it, got it from context, thought perhaps you'd coined it. Reference appreciated!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Thanks, Liz :)
I appreciate your feedback, as always.
Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment from lyenochka
Ah, that's something that everyone can do well from birth. It's the learning about how to consider others that's the real skill to master. Thanks for the fun little ditty - a great one for your pre-schoolers to learn!
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
Ah, that's something that everyone can do well from birth. It's the learning about how to consider others that's the real skill to master. Thanks for the fun little ditty - a great one for your pre-schoolers to learn!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Thanks so much, Helen :) I appreciate your feedback as always. Best wishes, Debra