Wine Fueled Words
20 word poem17 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and
presentation, Leann.
-You have used your
20 words well with
a good topic and description
of the wine and its sensations.
-I like the concluding line, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021
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-Nice artwork and
presentation, Leann.
-You have used your
20 words well with
a good topic and description
of the wine and its sensations.
-I like the concluding line, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Pam, for your supportive review and comments. I appreciate it very much. Hugs.
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You are very welcome, Leann.
Comment from Marigo J. Stathis
I think it's an interesting poem, that speaks to the connection between alcohol consumption and one's "spirits". Interestingly, it also speaks to the power of the senses (in this case smell, taste, and perhaps touch) to evoke memories and feelings. I think the poem would flow better (be less awkward) if you chose one "my" and replaced the other. For instance, "A Chablis, bestows upon my lips..." or "My Chablis bestows upon these lips". I love the last line. Great job. Thanks for sharing! Good luck with the contest, too! :)
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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I think it's an interesting poem, that speaks to the connection between alcohol consumption and one's "spirits". Interestingly, it also speaks to the power of the senses (in this case smell, taste, and perhaps touch) to evoke memories and feelings. I think the poem would flow better (be less awkward) if you chose one "my" and replaced the other. For instance, "A Chablis, bestows upon my lips..." or "My Chablis bestows upon these lips". I love the last line. Great job. Thanks for sharing! Good luck with the contest, too! :)
Comment Written 26-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Thank you for your thoughtful review and comment. I did not even notice that I said "my "twice, as I was so wrapped up in what I considered the more important words. However, I think you are right. Thank you for pointing that out. Hugs!
Comment from patcelaw
We do need to be careful with our words when we have strong drink. I have not been a drinker since I was 19 years old after having been drunk three times and had a problem each time. So i determined I did not need strong drink to live,
Patricia
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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We do need to be careful with our words when we have strong drink. I have not been a drinker since I was 19 years old after having been drunk three times and had a problem each time. So i determined I did not need strong drink to live,
Patricia
Comment Written 26-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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You are a much quicker learner than I, for sure! I do not drink often, and rarely to excess, but if I do, the words start to flow. Thank you so much for your review and comments. Hugs.
Comment from Mastery
Hi LeAnn. This is a naughty line but very impressive for a closer:
"That are better left corked in the bottle."
The entire poem is telling of a get together with wine that may or may not end with lovemaking . Good poem. I hope I interpreted correctly, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Hi LeAnn. This is a naughty line but very impressive for a closer:
"That are better left corked in the bottle."
The entire poem is telling of a get together with wine that may or may not end with lovemaking . Good poem. I hope I interpreted correctly, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 26-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Wine does do some strange things to people, doesn't it? Thank you so much for your review. Some questions are better left unanswered. Ha ha
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For sure, LeAnn.. Bob
Comment from Sally Law
There's a double meaning in your twenty words for the contest, dear Leann. I like the humorous solution: best to keep it bottled.
One thing to consider. Well-hidden should be hyphenated, and will count as one word. I would check Word Hippo for another descriptive term to keep this at twenty words. See:
https://www.wordhippo.com
I hope this is helpful and adds to your fine work.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs....
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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There's a double meaning in your twenty words for the contest, dear Leann. I like the humorous solution: best to keep it bottled.
One thing to consider. Well-hidden should be hyphenated, and will count as one word. I would check Word Hippo for another descriptive term to keep this at twenty words. See:
https://www.wordhippo.com
I hope this is helpful and adds to your fine work.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs....
Comment Written 26-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Crap! I had it hyphenated then unhyphenated it so it would work. I guess I'm not allowed to do that? Ha ha OK. Thank you so much for pointing that out. Back to the drawing board. :-) Thank you thank you thank you. Hugs.
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are clear, interesting and supportive. I pondered on
the words and theme of this poem. I like the title of this poem. The
poem flows and connects well. The artwork is perfect and goes well with
this poem. Have a great day!
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2021
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The author's words are clear, interesting and supportive. I pondered on
the words and theme of this poem. I like the title of this poem. The
poem flows and connects well. The artwork is perfect and goes well with
this poem. Have a great day!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for your kind comments and review. It is humbly appreciated. Hugs.
Comment from Boogienights
Been there done that. Many a times I've said things after two much wine, that would have been better left unsaid. This is so relatable and funny. Best of luck in the contest.:)
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2021
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Been there done that. Many a times I've said things after two much wine, that would have been better left unsaid. This is so relatable and funny. Best of luck in the contest.:)
Comment Written 25-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for your kind review and comment. I, too, have been there. Tricky stuff, that wine? :-)
Comment from L. Kalere
I think fellow wine drinkers and lovers of the vine, can appreciate the "complexity" of your metaphor. Well done, I truly enjoyed reading your 20 words, and I hope you do well in the contest.
Linda
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2021
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I think fellow wine drinkers and lovers of the vine, can appreciate the "complexity" of your metaphor. Well done, I truly enjoyed reading your 20 words, and I hope you do well in the contest.
Linda
Comment Written 25-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Linda, for your kind and supportive words. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem. Hugs!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Wine certainly loosens the tongue and we get more than we bargained for when people tell of their true feelings, I enjoyed these clever words, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2021
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Wine certainly loosens the tongue and we get more than we bargained for when people tell of their true feelings, I enjoyed these clever words, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Dolly, for your kind comments and review. Hugs!
Comment from Liz O'Neill
You use several literary techniques. Your personification combined with the sensory imagery will draw the reader in. Your metaphors are powerful. This becomes a cautionary tale. Well done.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2021
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You use several literary techniques. Your personification combined with the sensory imagery will draw the reader in. Your metaphors are powerful. This becomes a cautionary tale. Well done.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2021
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Thank you for your kind review. My husband has learned his lesson, and is very cautious when I drink wine, as all the things I've been thinking and not saying start tumbling out! :-) Hugs.