Renga Two
Viewing comments for Chapter 57 "Memories of You"multi-author book number two
10 total reviews
Comment from Mark D. R.
Gypsy,
This is a time where your concluding line is in disagreement with the first two. IMHO
Since the memory is present already, your silent guest is invited and not uninvited into the mind!
Mark
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2021
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Gypsy,
This is a time where your concluding line is in disagreement with the first two. IMHO
Since the memory is present already, your silent guest is invited and not uninvited into the mind!
Mark
Comment Written 11-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2021
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In this context, uninvited is an adjective.
Thank you very much for your review and feedback.
Gypsy
Comment from Debra White
Hello Gypsy,
Those uninvited guests can be a nuisance.
Memories of people from our past who have touched our lives in some way, do have a habit of interrupting our peace.
I really enjoyed this. It's very relatable.
Best wishes, Debra :)
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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Hello Gypsy,
Those uninvited guests can be a nuisance.
Memories of people from our past who have touched our lives in some way, do have a habit of interrupting our peace.
I really enjoyed this. It's very relatable.
Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment Written 09-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Debra :)
Comment from Becky Staab
Very telling. Captivating photo. It speaks to memories not always being positive with description of unwanted guest. Was this a loss of peaceful state? Excellent work
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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Very telling. Captivating photo. It speaks to memories not always being positive with description of unwanted guest. Was this a loss of peaceful state? Excellent work
Comment Written 09-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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I had my ex-husband in mind. LoL
Thank you very much for your review and kind words. Happy weekend :)
Gypsy
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy, and with me, rather than a person, it's what stupid, embarrassing thing I said TO a person; I'm the guiltiest person around; my own worst enemy
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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Another fine poem, Gypsy, and with me, rather than a person, it's what stupid, embarrassing thing I said TO a person; I'm the guiltiest person around; my own worst enemy
Comment Written 09-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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You need to be kinder to yourself.
Thank you very much for your review and kind words. Happy weekend :)
Gypsy
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I know it, but damn it, taint easy for me
Comment from Raul1
I like how you structured your poem. It's beautifully written. There are no grammatical errors. Excellent work! I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry! Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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I like how you structured your poem. It's beautifully written. There are no grammatical errors. Excellent work! I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry! Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 09-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. Happy weekend :)
Gypsy
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You're welcome.
Comment from lyenochka
That last line of "uninvited guest" says it all. The first line "memories of you" is neutral. The second one shows that peace is invaded by these memories. It's the last one that tells us that the memories are not good ones. Well done storytelling in haiku!
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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That last line of "uninvited guest" says it all. The first line "memories of you" is neutral. The second one shows that peace is invaded by these memories. It's the last one that tells us that the memories are not good ones. Well done storytelling in haiku!
Comment Written 09-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much, Helen.... for your review and kind words. Happy weekend :)
Gypsy
Comment from l.raven
Hi Sweet Girl, like you...I have memories
of someone who just won't go way...
and it doesn't help...she keeps popping up...
right when I think she's gone...
very well written my sweet friend...
love your poem...and love this picture...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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Hi Sweet Girl, like you...I have memories
of someone who just won't go way...
and it doesn't help...she keeps popping up...
right when I think she's gone...
very well written my sweet friend...
love your poem...and love this picture...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 09-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much, Linda.... for your review and kind words. Happy weekend :) love you too.
Gypsy
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your so welcome...and you have a Happy weekend as well...love xxoo
Comment from Sharon Davis
I am not familiar with Renga poetry style. What an interesting concept of collaboration. This 5-7-5 piece is well written and conveys a powerful theme of unwanted thoughts. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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I am not familiar with Renga poetry style. What an interesting concept of collaboration. This 5-7-5 piece is well written and conveys a powerful theme of unwanted thoughts. Nicely done.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. Happy weekend :)
Gypsy
Comment from Sherry Asbury
Clean, crisp, and to the point. This well-presented poem is something we can all relate to...especially those remembering a painful relationship. I feel honored to have read it as my first review since returning ...
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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Clean, crisp, and to the point. This well-presented poem is something we can all relate to...especially those remembering a painful relationship. I feel honored to have read it as my first review since returning ...
Comment Written 09-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. Happy weekend :)
Gypsy
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Be well and safe. Do something that makes you happy.
Comment from royowen
Yes, I think you and I remember many people that have "invaded" our thoughts, perhaps some unfortunate instances which are brought to mind and memory. Beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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Yes, I think you and I remember many people that have "invaded" our thoughts, perhaps some unfortunate instances which are brought to mind and memory. Beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
Comment Written 09-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. Happy weekend :)
Gypsy
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You too Gypsy