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The soul of a poet9 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
I like how you show us that it's the subconscious that wants to come up for air into our words as poets but sometimes our intentions don't get correctly expressed. My favorite line was: "My attempt to tickle the twinkle in your eyes"
I didn't understand:
Into a million pieces of improper palates. (A palate like in the parts of the mouth? Or pallets? )
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2021
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I like how you show us that it's the subconscious that wants to come up for air into our words as poets but sometimes our intentions don't get correctly expressed. My favorite line was: "My attempt to tickle the twinkle in your eyes"
I didn't understand:
Into a million pieces of improper palates. (A palate like in the parts of the mouth? Or pallets? )
Comment Written 31-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2021
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Palate, taste in the mouth of people, Helen, but I think I errored I used more than one. Thank you for reading. I'm sorry I'm late I was in Brownsville getting my honey.
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Hooray! I'm so glad you can be together with your wife!! Have a wonderful weekend!
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is an important cautionary tale. I have found the most misunderstanding occurs because someone writes something that is misunderstood. When someone writes something and they meant to communicate a different tone. If the person heard our inflections and saw our expression, they would possibly laugh or be emotionally moved. When we write, it is 1 dimensional. It is left to the reader to interpret and project their own issues. That's my thoughts.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2021
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This is an important cautionary tale. I have found the most misunderstanding occurs because someone writes something that is misunderstood. When someone writes something and they meant to communicate a different tone. If the person heard our inflections and saw our expression, they would possibly laugh or be emotionally moved. When we write, it is 1 dimensional. It is left to the reader to interpret and project their own issues. That's my thoughts.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Liz. :) I know what you mean. Yet there are many that find offence labeling what is written as politically incorrect. I'm glad you understand.
Comment from Tina Crute
This is so transparent and I can see your process of thinking about your writing and how it affects others. It is interesting because it is like a conversation with yourself about why you do what you do and how you feel about it. In some ways, it is impossible not to be yourself in writing. This poem feels like you are yourself. Sometimes poems feel too contrived and you do not get to know the poet. I like real.
Best to you!
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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This is so transparent and I can see your process of thinking about your writing and how it affects others. It is interesting because it is like a conversation with yourself about why you do what you do and how you feel about it. In some ways, it is impossible not to be yourself in writing. This poem feels like you are yourself. Sometimes poems feel too contrived and you do not get to know the poet. I like real.
Best to you!
Comment Written 26-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Tina. I'm glad you like real. :)
Comment from Pantygynt
Clearly autobiographical and complying with all the instructions as far as I can see. You complain of being unable to think when you write - I know that feeling, once the flow starts it seems a shame to stop it.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Clearly autobiographical and complying with all the instructions as far as I can see. You complain of being unable to think when you write - I know that feeling, once the flow starts it seems a shame to stop it.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Jim. Sometimes, without meaning to we write without thinking. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
No one is perfect and our writing can be criticised at times, but if we write from the heart and choose our words carefully we can certainly enter someone else's heart, there is much sorrow in your words here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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No one is perfect and our writing can be criticised at times, but if we write from the heart and choose our words carefully we can certainly enter someone else's heart, there is much sorrow in your words here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Dolly. :) My problem is that I choose the wrong words to express myself. I'm glad you can see.
Comment from Ritasher
Beautiful! Ah the pain, when you really just try being your best, but the things doesn't work as intended anyways, huh?.. I really loved these lines:
"I mess up. Trying to be funny is no laughing matter"
"My attempt to tickle the twinkle in your eyes
Is a blank screen and a silent voice."
If it hurts to read, it means I can relate. If I can relate, I know I am not alone feeling the similar way sometimes. Thank you!
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Beautiful! Ah the pain, when you really just try being your best, but the things doesn't work as intended anyways, huh?.. I really loved these lines:
"I mess up. Trying to be funny is no laughing matter"
"My attempt to tickle the twinkle in your eyes
Is a blank screen and a silent voice."
If it hurts to read, it means I can relate. If I can relate, I know I am not alone feeling the similar way sometimes. Thank you!
Comment Written 25-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Sherita, sometimes pain is all we have, and it tears us up when writing. I'm glad you can relate. Now, put your pain into words as they come to your heart.
Comment from Erika Seshadri
So very interesting! What a unique entry for the subconscious minds writing prompt.
I especially like the line "...it blows into a million pieces of improper palates."
All the best of luck to you!
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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So very interesting! What a unique entry for the subconscious minds writing prompt.
I especially like the line "...it blows into a million pieces of improper palates."
All the best of luck to you!
Comment Written 25-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Erika, without thinking one subconsciously hurt those we love. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Wendy G
I really like the expression "searching for a niche in your mind" - that's what we aim for, for our words to resonate and be memorable. Sometimes we don't succeed simply because we "pen our imperfections". Well written and well thought through.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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I really like the expression "searching for a niche in your mind" - that's what we aim for, for our words to resonate and be memorable. Sometimes we don't succeed simply because we "pen our imperfections". Well written and well thought through.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Wendy. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Goodadvicechan
I like the following part of the poem: 'I'm just a man seeking forgiveness for his foolishness in life... I'll try to think before I write...'
Don't we all, writers, have the same problem.? I apologize to all whom I have offended in my review...
Thank you for sharing your feelings and opinions.
Happy writing.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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I like the following part of the poem: 'I'm just a man seeking forgiveness for his foolishness in life... I'll try to think before I write...'
Don't we all, writers, have the same problem.? I apologize to all whom I have offended in my review...
Thank you for sharing your feelings and opinions.
Happy writing.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Goodadicechan. In a way, I am apologizing to any I have hurt.