I see You
Through the dark13 total reviews
Comment from SimianSavant
This is a deeply moving work with many layers and hidden truths. It already has its own music, and could also be rich material for a choral composer, something perhaps already alluded to in your text. Thanks for putting this work out there.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2021
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This is a deeply moving work with many layers and hidden truths. It already has its own music, and could also be rich material for a choral composer, something perhaps already alluded to in your text. Thanks for putting this work out there.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2021
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Thank you for your wonderful and encouraging comments, my musical talent is Zip, but words I can play with like (revenge) something I really need to work on-but hey we all have our moments and as long as we get the chance to correct our bad ones we should be OK. very much appreciated****kahpot
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I actually do compose (the poetry is for fun) and could imagine working with this material or an adaptation of it if you were to give me permission to try a sketch of it and maybe get a sight reading or performance of it at some future Christmas. I have not written serious works for choir yet but I have sung in some and have good teachers who could help me with that, and know of a choir or two that might have the capability to do it justice. Currently reading through Stephen Sondheim's autobiography; sometimes poetry has so much music in it already that it cannot easily be set, but I could see this working.
Comment from pome lover
Ah, Kahpot,
For all those things you feel, you also add joy to others - to me, tonight. You made me laugh and I thank you. Decided to read something of yours, and this makes me teary. (though beautifully written)
Bless you and good night.
Katharine - pome lover
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2021
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Ah, Kahpot,
For all those things you feel, you also add joy to others - to me, tonight. You made me laugh and I thank you. Decided to read something of yours, and this makes me teary. (though beautifully written)
Bless you and good night.
Katharine - pome lover
Comment Written 09-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for your exceptional review and comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from AnnaLinda
Kahpot,
Is this still a blind entry?
I'm on my phone and I can't tell. El8zabeth Emerald suggested I take a look at this. I missed this. You are sneaky.
You've penned a remarkable poem! So much great rhyme, depth and your ending lines gave me chills...
"My brailled keys hold all my light. My brailled keys release my sight." Wow!
So wonderful you can travel without a mask to countries unknown.
So, so beautiful!
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021
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Kahpot,
Is this still a blind entry?
I'm on my phone and I can't tell. El8zabeth Emerald suggested I take a look at this. I missed this. You are sneaky.
You've penned a remarkable poem! So much great rhyme, depth and your ending lines gave me chills...
"My brailled keys hold all my light. My brailled keys release my sight." Wow!
So wonderful you can travel without a mask to countries unknown.
So, so beautiful!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021
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Wow! thank you so very much, no it is no longer in a contest, I enter some of those as the "prompts" seem to find my muse, yes imagination can take one anywhere, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
SSSSSStupendous! Congrats on a well-deserved prize for this panoramic view of why you write--stunning phrasing and startling concluding couplet take this over the top. Cheerssssss. LIZ
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021
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SSSSSStupendous! Congrats on a well-deserved prize for this panoramic view of why you write--stunning phrasing and startling concluding couplet take this over the top. Cheerssssss. LIZ
Comment Written 28-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021
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Wow! thank you so very much, yes some of the requirements for these contests seem to ignite my muse, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem about writing, I See You, holds great meaning in the powerful task of working through obstacles to communicate thoughts, feelings, and the hearts take on a beautiful world. Neat.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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This poem about writing, I See You, holds great meaning in the powerful task of working through obstacles to communicate thoughts, feelings, and the hearts take on a beautiful world. Neat.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your very encouraging comments, always very much appreciated
Comment from Patty Palmer
A very good entry for this contest. Writing is a way of expressing oneself. It helps me talk myself through all kinds of troubles and by the time I'm finished, I usually know how I'm going to handle the problem and it's always in a calm reasonable manner. I like to think that writing is my way of thinking things through. I list the good parts and the bad and then I usually l have my plan. Good luck with the contest!
Patty
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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A very good entry for this contest. Writing is a way of expressing oneself. It helps me talk myself through all kinds of troubles and by the time I'm finished, I usually know how I'm going to handle the problem and it's always in a calm reasonable manner. I like to think that writing is my way of thinking things through. I list the good parts and the bad and then I usually l have my plan. Good luck with the contest!
Patty
Comment Written 20-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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Thank you, this is a wonderful review, your comments are what I was trying to say, much appreciated
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a profound poem that tells of the overcoming of willpower and desire over difficulties and adversity. You are obviously one determined writer.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2021
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This is a profound poem that tells of the overcoming of willpower and desire over difficulties and adversity. You are obviously one determined writer.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much, improving all the time
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a beautifully written poem. It has a great flow and rhyme scheme. My brailled keys hold all my light. My Brailled keys release my sight. So amazing. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2021
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This is a beautifully written poem. It has a great flow and rhyme scheme. My brailled keys hold all my light. My Brailled keys release my sight. So amazing. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It fascinates me to read of other peoples thought processes why they write and for me it is the exact opposite. I write only about my experiences and places I have seen and my opinions about people, places from a personal perspective. I would find it really hard to write from the heart about a place I had never visited, but here this seems to inspire you, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2021
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It fascinates me to read of other peoples thought processes why they write and for me it is the exact opposite. I write only about my experiences and places I have seen and my opinions about people, places from a personal perspective. I would find it really hard to write from the heart about a place I had never visited, but here this seems to inspire you, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2021
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Some times words like yours about people allow me to know them though we've never met, scenes I can vision though never seen, yours and all FS story tellers give me knowledge I've never known, for some, words can be all they can see, as always very much appreciated
Comment from Wendy G
So beautiful! So amazing! You capture what many of us wish we could - the freshness and originality, and the truth and rightness of your words. I hope you do very well in this contest!
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2021
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So beautiful! So amazing! You capture what many of us wish we could - the freshness and originality, and the truth and rightness of your words. I hope you do very well in this contest!
Comment Written 18-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much