Comment from MissMerri

Exceptional

As I often tell you, your creative powers are amazing as you write such visible, believable characters, and give them the exact right words to say, creating scenes that come alive in the reader's mind. We are watching the story unfold, growing more curious by the moment as the problems for Danielle compound with each passing day. I assure you, you have no problem keeping readers engaged and turning the pages. I found no nits to complain about so this is definitely a six-worthy write. Loved it! MM

 Comment Written 28-Feb-2021

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2021

You are so sweet to encourage me. The next chapters have me stumped in more than one way, especially on the conservation-industrial issues. EEEK! How can that end in romance? Love you, MM.

reply by MissMerri on 01-Mar-2021

I'm not sure, but my idea would be to avoid those issues as much as possible and let the conversations be about other things. But perhaps you want to make it a more integral part of your story. Hmmmm... one more reason I don't do stories.

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I'm so glad you are continuing with this, Marie. This story has a lot of promise because of the characters come from such different socio-political viewpoints. Hoping that Stewart and Danielle can see each other's feelings more clearly!

Comments:
Loved the poetic turn of phrases in:
silently wrapped up in strange feelings
and
clouds were sprayed in sunset colors
Suggestions:
In only one day, a big puzzle had happened. (I wish for something more powerful than "had happened" maybe "mushroomed?" or "exploded" on to the scene -or- unveiled itself? -- just some crazy ideas)

"I don't know what made say that stupid (missing a word, "me"?)

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2021

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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2021

Good suggestions, Helen. You are so helpful. Thanks for all your comments.

reply by lyenochka on 28-Feb-2021

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Comment from Rdfrdmom2

Excellent

Alaskastory:

I have to admit that I kind of stumbled upon your novel and am finding
it to my liking. When I realized you were not too many chapters into it, I decided to hop in. It's not every day one gets to read about Alaska. I look
forward to reading the rest of your book.

Jan

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2021

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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2021

Thanks a million, Jan. I appreciate you taking time to read this chapter.

Comment from Melodie Michelle

Excellent

Excellent story and I love the characters! They interact nicely together and this is a well written piece;-)

If I were to change anything it would imagery. I would find something that fit more snug;-)

Thank you for sharing;-) Many blessings to you and your family;-)

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2021

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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2021

I an happy to know you enjoyed reading this chapter and for your comments. Thanks so much.

reply by Melodie Michelle on 01-Mar-2021

;-)

Comment from Poetic Friend

Excellent

Although I have not read the preceding chapters, this one kept me quite intrigued. The soft passionate scenes are quite intense.

Danielle seems to be forming a love triangle, and I sense Stewart's jealousy. The plot is certainly thickening.

I look forward to reading future chapters.

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2021

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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2021

Thanks so much for taking time to read this chapter. I very much appreciate your comments.

Comment from Suzanna Ray

Excellent

Dear Alaska, as I mentioned in my previous review, this woman definitely has no control, particularly of her emotions, Or her tongue. I hope she does not trip over it in the next chapter, because Stewart sounds a whole lot better to me, than the guy in Kansas.

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2021

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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2021

I very much appreciate your comments. You give me a challenge to try to give the women much more control. Thanks!