Renga Two
Viewing comments for Chapter 49 "Love Birds"multi-author book number two
5 total reviews
Comment from karenina
I gave up on trying to add my (highly lacking) addition to this book...seems every time I went to submit someone else (or two or three) had already written THAT next part and you were three steps further along. That's cook because, seriously? Much as I love the form, I am a rookie's rookie. I do sit back and enjoy however--and this is adorably romantic!--Karenina
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2021
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I gave up on trying to add my (highly lacking) addition to this book...seems every time I went to submit someone else (or two or three) had already written THAT next part and you were three steps further along. That's cook because, seriously? Much as I love the form, I am a rookie's rookie. I do sit back and enjoy however--and this is adorably romantic!--Karenina
Comment Written 09-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2021
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Thank you very much, Karenina :)
gypsy hugs
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Very welcome! Sorry for being redundant!--Karenina
Comment from lyenochka
Enjoyed your 5-7-5. I do like the sound of the cooing of doves and the assonance of "coo" with "noon" hint at the sound. I wonder if the last line should have have an apostrophe after birds to show possessive or have the love birds harmonize?
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2021
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Enjoyed your 5-7-5. I do like the sound of the cooing of doves and the assonance of "coo" with "noon" hint at the sound. I wonder if the last line should have have an apostrophe after birds to show possessive or have the love birds harmonize?
Comment Written 03-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2021
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read this renga chapter. I appreciate your time and feedback. I added the apostrophe :)
Comment from Lance S. Loria
Ahhh. Sweet mystery of love. That's so nice. Getting ready for Spring. I can hardly wait. I'm so tired of winter. A very nice 5-7-5 addition to your existing collection of poetry works. Keep writing and sharing. No edits or adjustments to suggest.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2021
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Ahhh. Sweet mystery of love. That's so nice. Getting ready for Spring. I can hardly wait. I'm so tired of winter. A very nice 5-7-5 addition to your existing collection of poetry works. Keep writing and sharing. No edits or adjustments to suggest.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2021
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Thank you very much, Lance :)
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy--little-know fact--soon after this picture was taken, Mama Bird moved out of the nest and took her baby birds with her; now Papa Bird spends all his time at the Birdbath Pub drowning his sorrows!
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2021
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Another fine poem, Gypsy--little-know fact--soon after this picture was taken, Mama Bird moved out of the nest and took her baby birds with her; now Papa Bird spends all his time at the Birdbath Pub drowning his sorrows!
Comment Written 03-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2021
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Thank you very much, Mike. :)
Comment from Raul1
I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. It's beautifully written and the sentences flow with clarity. I like your poem. Well done. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2021
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I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. It's beautifully written and the sentences flow with clarity. I like your poem. Well done. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 03-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2021
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Thank you very much, Raul :)