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32 total reviews
Comment from Allezw2
This a quiet posting, noting the slight melancholy of a veteran seeing the names of others who did not survive to return to their former lives. The Rector is a charming break in the visitor's revery. His invitation is a perfect opportunity to further his queries. As always, it is a distinct pleasure to see an obvious effort to research a period piece including dress and mannerisms of speech. Thank goodness for perpetual archives that have these references in ready access from the internet. Books and movies from the period render the opportunity to review fashion in dress and speech as they were used then. Your effort is recognized and appreciated. Fantasist
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
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This a quiet posting, noting the slight melancholy of a veteran seeing the names of others who did not survive to return to their former lives. The Rector is a charming break in the visitor's revery. His invitation is a perfect opportunity to further his queries. As always, it is a distinct pleasure to see an obvious effort to research a period piece including dress and mannerisms of speech. Thank goodness for perpetual archives that have these references in ready access from the internet. Books and movies from the period render the opportunity to review fashion in dress and speech as they were used then. Your effort is recognized and appreciated. Fantasist
Comment Written 08-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
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Thank you for this review. The Internet is an amazing research tool with answers to most questions only a click away as opposed to a trip to the local library and trawling through all kinds of reference books.
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The pleasure is mine.
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On online reference data bases: I enroll for a class or two at one of several community colleges solely for access to the student only access to specialty data bases with otherwise stratospheric subscription rates!
Comment from Mabaker12
I'm starting this one at the beginning Jim so you score the first six. I'll follow it right through and enjoy every word. I found no spags, though when I read I don't see mistakes. Sincerely Anne.
reply by the author on 28-May-2021
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I'm starting this one at the beginning Jim so you score the first six. I'll follow it right through and enjoy every word. I found no spags, though when I read I don't see mistakes. Sincerely Anne.
Comment Written 28-May-2021
reply by the author on 28-May-2021
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Thank you for this six star review. I hope you enjoy the experience of reading it through from start to finish. There are 47 posts involved altogether. Only 5 or six remain uncosted to date so I wonder who will finish first, you or me.
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Well Jim I no sooner get started on a Ch 1 then something else crops up and suddenly it's ch21.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Jim, I did not read Book 1, but I have decided to start Book 2 from the beginning. It will take a while to catch up, but with the interesting plot I believe I will read most of it sooner rather than later. This promises to keep me interested.
Ralf
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Jim, I did not read Book 1, but I have decided to start Book 2 from the beginning. It will take a while to catch up, but with the interesting plot I believe I will read most of it sooner rather than later. This promises to keep me interested.
Ralf
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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I am so pleased you are intending to go back to the beginning of this book. Please do not feel you have to review every chapter, apart from the current active chapter every one has achieved ATB, which is quite remarkable really. Thank you for this one
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I'm running behind, as I find I have little spare reading time this month (wonder why). I just hope I won't have to go back and read book one to follow book two.
I found this to be a tightly-written first chapter, with good description. The only exception to this was the first paragraph, which was wordy with a couple of redundancies (e.g. round the sharp bend in the road > round a sharp bend / A little further on, he was forced to change gear to climb the hill > very wordy).
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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I'm running behind, as I find I have little spare reading time this month (wonder why). I just hope I won't have to go back and read book one to follow book two.
I found this to be a tightly-written first chapter, with good description. The only exception to this was the first paragraph, which was wordy with a couple of redundancies (e.g. round the sharp bend in the road > round a sharp bend / A little further on, he was forced to change gear to climb the hill > very wordy).
Comment Written 17-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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Ia am most grateful for this review, and I know exactly what you mean, but I remain unrepentant. I dislike this tendency towards skeletal writing, which in my opinion removes the colour and comfort from a novel. Most plots can be summarised in a couple of pages but to what end. I want my readers to inhabit the world of my characters and come to terms with each bend in the road.
Comment from Lucy de Welles
Oh my, this is exciting already. The mystery of what happened to Thomas Warburton! Can't wait to find out! Seek and ye shall find. I know that Colonel Allen has a lot to teach us.
I'm on the edge of my chair!
Lucy
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Oh my, this is exciting already. The mystery of what happened to Thomas Warburton! Can't wait to find out! Seek and ye shall find. I know that Colonel Allen has a lot to teach us.
I'm on the edge of my chair!
Lucy
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Many thanks for reading and reviewing so positively.
Comment from Jeffrey Mitchell
Thank you for sharing your story. It has suspense, curiosity, location and the past. Very well written. And great choice in characters to tell the story, I wish you all the best with your book.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you for sharing your story. It has suspense, curiosity, location and the past. Very well written. And great choice in characters to tell the story, I wish you all the best with your book.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for this encouraging review.
Comment from Sherry Asbury2
Can't wait to read more. Your voice is great and I enjoy reading your work.
No fluff, no fancy verbiage...and all is according to time and place. Yet you also educate...giving us delicious parcels of information to feast on...
I will look forward to following this story as it develops.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Can't wait to read more. Your voice is great and I enjoy reading your work.
No fluff, no fancy verbiage...and all is according to time and place. Yet you also educate...giving us delicious parcels of information to feast on...
I will look forward to following this story as it develops.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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I am so pleased you enjoyed the start of this new story. I thank you for your kind review. More will be posted later today.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A great looking car.
-Thanks for all of the updates.
-A lot has certainly happened.
-I was surprised that Tom W. had
been in the service, although I
wonder if he volunteered or
if it was because of the draft.
-It was not surprising to learn
that he was not only well liked
but saved his commander's life.
-What a remarkable young man.
-Peter Allen definitely sets the
book up with an intriguing mystery.
-It sounds like we will learn more
of Tom and maybe his family as
he speaks with the vicar.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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-A great looking car.
-Thanks for all of the updates.
-A lot has certainly happened.
-I was surprised that Tom W. had
been in the service, although I
wonder if he volunteered or
if it was because of the draft.
-It was not surprising to learn
that he was not only well liked
but saved his commander's life.
-What a remarkable young man.
-Peter Allen definitely sets the
book up with an intriguing mystery.
-It sounds like we will learn more
of Tom and maybe his family as
he speaks with the vicar.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Many years ago back in the 1960s I had a friend whose hobby was restoring old cars. He had one of these. It was the experience of it that caused me to use it in this story.
Many thanks for this positive review.
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Thanks for sharing about the car; it was a good looking one. You are very welcome for the review, too.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was a really intersting start to this second book, Jim. Now you have set the stage, we will all be waiting to find out the real reason he wants to find the mystery woman. I wonder if the rector will be able to help him in his search. This was really well written and as a hook for the first page, you've done a great job. I look forward to tomorrows post. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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That was a really intersting start to this second book, Jim. Now you have set the stage, we will all be waiting to find out the real reason he wants to find the mystery woman. I wonder if the rector will be able to help him in his search. This was really well written and as a hook for the first page, you've done a great job. I look forward to tomorrows post. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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I am so pleased you found the opening of this second part of the trilogy interesting. Now to maintain it.
Many thanks for the positive review.
Comment from padumachitta
Hello
A very good introduction to the characters of the next book. I like the way you weave these two together and of course the honesty shown by Allen.
I am sorry though, I am not a fan of a *, perhpas I am a snob, but footnotes with a 1, 2, 3, sit better with me.(It just feels more serious) and you probably would not use them when this gets published.
Mind you, I didn't need them and knew the words and their meanings.
okay my two cents worth.
Please get writing, I want to see this develope:-)
Stay safe.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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Hello
A very good introduction to the characters of the next book. I like the way you weave these two together and of course the honesty shown by Allen.
I am sorry though, I am not a fan of a *, perhpas I am a snob, but footnotes with a 1, 2, 3, sit better with me.(It just feels more serious) and you probably would not use them when this gets published.
Mind you, I didn't need them and knew the words and their meanings.
okay my two cents worth.
Please get writing, I want to see this develope:-)
Stay safe.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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I have yet to find a way of referring to footnotes on FS other than with stars. I certainly won't be using those in any published form. Thank you for taking the time and trouble to read and review this.
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And it will get published!