The Last Unicorn
I Believe contest entry11 total reviews
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Hilarious--what a twist--took me by surprise--glad I didn't skip this--normally I pass on fantasy stuff but I just finished reading your delightfully clever vampire story and knew I wouldn't be disappointed! This may well be a winner!
(Puts me in mind of a real event--marine scientists captured a rare blue lobster--painstakingly examined and documented--then boiled the thing for supper)
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Hilarious--what a twist--took me by surprise--glad I didn't skip this--normally I pass on fantasy stuff but I just finished reading your delightfully clever vampire story and knew I wouldn't be disappointed! This may well be a winner!
(Puts me in mind of a real event--marine scientists captured a rare blue lobster--painstakingly examined and documented--then boiled the thing for supper)
Comment Written 07-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Lol, ate it for supper, huh? Haha. Thank you for the excellent review, Elizabeth. This is one of those stories that I wrote strictly to get a silly ending in there. I love to shoot people's happy ending hopes down on here. Haha. I knew a couple people would get a chuckle out of it and that's all I'm going for. I really appreciate the gracious stars, E. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again.
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Ron
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
STOP IT. That was not the ending I was expecting. But I can totally see some crazy power-mad dictator thinking that everything and everyone is, at his whim, to be used or discarded, at his own pleasure.
Clever, clever -- and so far my favorite in the booth! Good luck~
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Dear Mystery Writer,
STOP IT. That was not the ending I was expecting. But I can totally see some crazy power-mad dictator thinking that everything and everyone is, at his whim, to be used or discarded, at his own pleasure.
Clever, clever -- and so far my favorite in the booth! Good luck~
Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Lol. Yeah, I based the whole story just so I could use the last line. I couldn't just give it a pretty, happy ending like everyone was expecting. lol Thank you for the fantastic review and generous stars, Robyn. I'm glad you liked the piece even with the ridiculous ending. I hope you have a great weekend.
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Ron
Comment from Earl Corp
I love the twist at the end, that's how I would have written it. Good luck in the contest. Very nice job. Thank you for sharing. Stay safe and stay healthy.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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I love the twist at the end, that's how I would have written it. Good luck in the contest. Very nice job. Thank you for sharing. Stay safe and stay healthy.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Thanks for the great review, Earl. And let me say congrats on a well deserved win. I really appreciate the gracious stars, friend. Have a great weekend.
Ron
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This piece of writing as an entry for the I Believe writing prompt was an enjoyable and delightful read. Best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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This piece of writing as an entry for the I Believe writing prompt was an enjoyable and delightful read. Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the great review, Rebecca. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Ron
Comment from LisaMay
So, one unicorn is worth 300 men. I wonder if it was the king's intention or a 'misteak' on the part of Capt. Matir to get the cook to dish it up? I kinda knew you would kill that beautiful creature off (precedent has been set), but how you got there was clever writing.... good dialogue, wow-factor action with wizardry, and a nasty reveal at the end.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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So, one unicorn is worth 300 men. I wonder if it was the king's intention or a 'misteak' on the part of Capt. Matir to get the cook to dish it up? I kinda knew you would kill that beautiful creature off (precedent has been set), but how you got there was clever writing.... good dialogue, wow-factor action with wizardry, and a nasty reveal at the end.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Lol. "misteak" Thank you for the great review, Lisa. You're pretty much the only one who mentioned about the king thinking that it was worth sacrificing 300 men for a unicorn steak. lol As always, I appreciate the great review and gracious stars, L. I hope all is well on your side of the world.
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Ron
Comment from Cynthia Adams1
Your story was very well-written. It flowed really well and the dialogue seemed true to the time (as far as I can tell from other readings I've done, having not been there in person :)
I very much like the myth of unicorns.
All the way through reading it I was afraid something would happen to the unicorn. I had come to think he would be alright.
But, alas, no...he is to be some King's random fancy.
The surprise ending may have made it a better story objectively speaking, but it only made me sad. If the unicorn had lived, I would have remembered your story fondly.
As it is, for me, your story, though well-written, is more easily forgetable.
Your writing skill is quite evident, though.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2020
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Your story was very well-written. It flowed really well and the dialogue seemed true to the time (as far as I can tell from other readings I've done, having not been there in person :)
I very much like the myth of unicorns.
All the way through reading it I was afraid something would happen to the unicorn. I had come to think he would be alright.
But, alas, no...he is to be some King's random fancy.
The surprise ending may have made it a better story objectively speaking, but it only made me sad. If the unicorn had lived, I would have remembered your story fondly.
As it is, for me, your story, though well-written, is more easily forgetable.
Your writing skill is quite evident, though.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2020
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Yes, not all people view humor the same way. Some like it, some don't. We all wish life came with beautiful, happy endings to every story, but the sad truth is, it doesn't. I'm sure we'll all find things easily forgettable when they don't turn out like we hoped. Thank you for the review and stars, Cynthia. Hopefully the next story has a happy ending.
Comment from LyndaS
Oh, pardon me, Sire. How do you want your unicorn steak cooked? Hahahaha!
This was a great little story with a hilarious, twist ending. Story development was excellent and you smoothly and effortlessly led us to your killer (albeit out there) ending which I enjoyed very much.
Also, your art drew me into this post. Your unicorn is glorious and using Clive Owen as Captain Matir really intrigued me.
This is a great (and original) entry into this contest advertisement and I wish you luck in the booth. You'll have my vote. Thanks for the fantasy escape. My favorite! Well done!!
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Oh, pardon me, Sire. How do you want your unicorn steak cooked? Hahahaha!
This was a great little story with a hilarious, twist ending. Story development was excellent and you smoothly and effortlessly led us to your killer (albeit out there) ending which I enjoyed very much.
Also, your art drew me into this post. Your unicorn is glorious and using Clive Owen as Captain Matir really intrigued me.
This is a great (and original) entry into this contest advertisement and I wish you luck in the booth. You'll have my vote. Thanks for the fantasy escape. My favorite! Well done!!
Comment Written 05-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the fantastic review and big sixer, Lynda. I really only used the picture of Clive Owen because that's the only google image that matched what I was trying pull off in the picture. I know that this is a still from a movie but it worked for what I needed it for. I'm glad you had a chuckle at my ridiculous ending. Again, thank you for the stars. I'm glad you liked my little tale. Have yourself a wonderful weekend.
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Ron
Comment from the13thpoet
Good morning thank you for sharing your story, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Good morning thank you for sharing your story, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the great review, 13. I appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you like the piece.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This fiction, a contest entry for I believe, speaks a mystic fantasy taletelling about the last unicorn, the dialogues are realistic, with a catchy beginning and mystery revelation ending; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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This fiction, a contest entry for I believe, speaks a mystic fantasy taletelling about the last unicorn, the dialogues are realistic, with a catchy beginning and mystery revelation ending; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 05-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Alcreator. I really appreciate the generous stars, friend. I'm glad you liked the piece. I hope you have a great weekend.
Ron
Comment from royowen
Very witty. It's just as well there's no special attachment to the last unicorn, with its mystical powers, this is so well written with great characters and a very worthy plot that takes us into interesting places, beautifully written, 300 men, well done my friend, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Very witty. It's just as well there's no special attachment to the last unicorn, with its mystical powers, this is so well written with great characters and a very worthy plot that takes us into interesting places, beautifully written, 300 men, well done my friend, blessings Roy
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the great review and generous stars, Roy. I appreciate the kind comments. I'm glad you liked you liked my fantasy story with my silly ending. lol Have a good one.
Ron
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Well done