Renga Multi-Author Book
Viewing comments for Chapter 88 "Spring Garden"Renga is a Japanese linked poetry 5/7/5 and 7/7
10 total reviews
Comment from juliaSjames
This is a pretty write, colorful and vibrant. I'm in awe of those bulbs that Nature programs to burst into bright blooms in early spring providing food for hungry bees.
You sustain the personification beautifully, "cloaks of icy snow" reminds me of the Snow Queen.
Excellent satori rounds off an uplifting write.
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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This is a pretty write, colorful and vibrant. I'm in awe of those bulbs that Nature programs to burst into bright blooms in early spring providing food for hungry bees.
You sustain the personification beautifully, "cloaks of icy snow" reminds me of the Snow Queen.
Excellent satori rounds off an uplifting write.
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 22-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much - glad you enjoyed this addition to the book.
Comment from RGstar
Lovely imagery June. Funny, I also use crocuses in my next poem. Beautiful.
Nicely worded.
''waltz of spring blossoms'' Great imagery here.
My best wishes.
Have a nice day.
RG
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Lovely imagery June. Funny, I also use crocuses in my next poem. Beautiful.
Nicely worded.
''waltz of spring blossoms'' Great imagery here.
My best wishes.
Have a nice day.
RG
Comment Written 21-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Thank you for sharing your positive thoughts!
Comment from Cindy Decker
June,
the photo is pretty, and I'm glad I read your poem because I didn't know what crocuses were about.
A nice 5 7 5 poem addition to the book.; its sad that the warmth of spring won't be here for five more months.
Excellent work.
Best wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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June,
the photo is pretty, and I'm glad I read your poem because I didn't know what crocuses were about.
A nice 5 7 5 poem addition to the book.; its sad that the warmth of spring won't be here for five more months.
Excellent work.
Best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 21-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this addition to the Renga book!
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Have a nice day, June.☀️
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 in the multi-author Renga book making ready for the Spring ball when the crocuses breaking through the crust of snow and the temperatures rising to melt the snow.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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A very well-written 5-7-5 in the multi-author Renga book making ready for the Spring ball when the crocuses breaking through the crust of snow and the temperatures rising to melt the snow.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Thank you for sharing your positive thoughts.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your addition to the renga book is great, June. I like the personification of the crocus and the s & w alliteration. You art choice pairs well with your words, too.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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Your addition to the renga book is great, June. I like the personification of the crocus and the s & w alliteration. You art choice pairs well with your words, too.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 20-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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I'm glad you liked this addition to the Renga book!
Comment from royowen
I guess this is a sign that when these hardiest of God's example of survival exist, that we can be encouraged that we can survive no matter the circumstance or trial, well done June a superb post, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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I guess this is a sign that when these hardiest of God's example of survival exist, that we can be encouraged that we can survive no matter the circumstance or trial, well done June a superb post, blessings Roy
Comment Written 20-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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I do admire the resilience of the crocus - thank you for sharing your sentiments.
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Most welcome June
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for your 5-7-5 contribution to the Renga collaboration. Your use of personification and alliteration were very effective. I enjoyed your beautiful picture as well. Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your 5-7-5 contribution to the Renga collaboration. Your use of personification and alliteration were very effective. I enjoyed your beautiful picture as well. Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 20-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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Thank you! Glad you liked it.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Spring Ball
by June Sargent
Hello, June,
Great addition to our renga book. It captures the winter season and follows dovemarie chapter well. Thank you very much for excellent chapter. Good syllable count and connection between lines. Beautiful presentation.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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Spring Ball
by June Sargent
Hello, June,
Great addition to our renga book. It captures the winter season and follows dovemarie chapter well. Thank you very much for excellent chapter. Good syllable count and connection between lines. Beautiful presentation.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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Glad you liked this addition to the book!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You are thinking of spring already June? And why not, I can't wait for it to arrive and see the new buds in England. I love the thought of crocus shedding cloaks of icy snow, just perfect, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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You are thinking of spring already June? And why not, I can't wait for it to arrive and see the new buds in England. I love the thought of crocus shedding cloaks of icy snow, just perfect, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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Yes, thinking of spring will make the coming winter months go by faster.
Comment from Mark D. R.
June,
An outstanding contribution to this Renga collaboration. The gentleness of both artwork and verse really makes for an excellent presentation for FS reviewers.
Do like:
your coloring scheme
amazing artwork
w-letter alliteration in last line
crocuses covered in icy snow - very vivid image! - and their Spring arrival
Mark
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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June,
An outstanding contribution to this Renga collaboration. The gentleness of both artwork and verse really makes for an excellent presentation for FS reviewers.
Do like:
your coloring scheme
amazing artwork
w-letter alliteration in last line
crocuses covered in icy snow - very vivid image! - and their Spring arrival
Mark
Comment Written 20-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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I am glad you enjoyed this addition to the Renga book!