The scene opens with a young couple in passionate embrace. The atmosphere is steamy.
She whispers in his ear, "I think you're the best writer in the world, Darling."
"Yeah, but you're in love with me. Of course, you think that. I need objective opinions. How can I improve without input and instruction? I need real critique."
He breaks away and sits in front of his computer terminal. His shoulders are slumped.
His focus shifts to the computer screen, which is flashing in big letters:
FANSTORY.COM!
He taps enter and a sultry voice speaks from the computer:
"Need a real opinion from real writers? Join Fanstory!
Get constant feedback from fellow writers. Enter daily contests that pay real money. Instructions available in all forms of prose and poetry. Have you been thinking about getting serious with your writing?
Join Fanstory! A serious writer's site for serious writers. All of this can be yours for less than ten dollars a month. We have members who are experts in reviewing, publishing, editing and all forms of writing.
We'll love you too, AND we'll tell you the TRUTH!"
He looks up from the screen at her.
"Honey, there's someone else".
FANSTORY.COM
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Author Notes
The first ten seconds would be the embrace, the opening dialogue and the screen flashing FANSTORY.COM!''
I suppose this is a bit more than just "TEXT", but I'm thinking, having skipped many a youtube add, you need to GRAB the listener with something out of the ordinary. Soooo, I added the brief scenario to frame the text. I think you need something with a little more flash than someone sitting at a computer terminal writing. Remember, us listeners already have the cursor above "SKIP" and our finger pointed at "ENTER". That's what you're up against. :))
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