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Tanka (rules in author notes)
2024 Gypsy's Tanka
: The Ocean Between Us by Gypsy Blue Rose

 
 
 
no way to reach you

with the ocean between us

    in this warm summer night—

my breast burning with desire

and my heart aflame
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

Author Notes
Tanka is my favorite Japanese poetic form. Tanka is a romantic and passionate poem. It was created in the 8th century and used in the Japanese Imperial Court where lovers exchanged a tanka after a night together. Most of the best tanka poets are women. I feel a kinship with these women tanka poets. After all this time, is still relatable.
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Rules: Tanka is a Japanese unrhymed five-line poem with 12 to 31 syllables usually arranged in five lines. The syllable count is 31 syllables OR LESS because Japanese syllables (called 'on') are shorter sounds than English syllables. The third line is usually used to transition from the top descriptive lines to the image-focused reflective metaphor, simile, or personification for the closing lines. The subject matter varies, but most tanka are emotionally stirring or profound, and many are about love. click here if you want to read modern tanka examples

click here to read Tanka Society of America

click here if you want to read modern tanka rules

Thank you very much for your time and kind review.

Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid.

painting by Ikenaga Yasunari

     

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