groovy frog
serenades mate—
 "come to my pad"
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Author Notes
** Baby Boomer = a person born in America between 1946 and 1965.
** Groovy and Pad are slang words used in the 60s
-- GROOVY = is an American slang colloquialism popular during the 1950s, '60s and '70s. It is roughly synonymous with words such as "excellent", "fashionable", or "amazing", depending on context.
-- PAD = is a slang word that refers to a place where a person lives. AND = also, a round floating LEAF of a water lily in a pond.
This week write a SUCCINCT HAIKU in the Haiku Club. You may use the event picture or your own.
You probably ask yourself, how can I make haiku shorter than it is? Well, you can do it with a few steps. Many people think haiku has to be 5/7/5 but it doesn't have to. The rule with haiku is to keep it as SUCCINCT as possible. Japanese syllables are shorter than English syllables. Keep it in the present tense.
EXAMPLE
The Old Pond by Matsuo Basho in English: 2/4/3 syllables
Old pond (2 syllables)
a frog jumps in (4 syllables)
water's sound (3 syllable)
The Old Pond by Matsuo Basho in Japanese: 5/7/5
Furu ike ya (5 syllables)
kawazu tobikomu (7 syllables)
mizu no oto (5 syllables)
One rule is to get rid of any extra words you don't need, like: (the, an, a,). Also, get rid of duplicate words, like (cold snow- snow is always cold) ( frozen iced lake-frozen and iced is the same) (hot sun- the sun is always hot) (Lonely alone-lonely and alone is the same) etc...
EXAMPLE
The cold crisp wind blows (5 syllables)
crossing the high tall green grass (7 syllables)
The grass waves goodbye (5 syllables)
SAME HAIKU WRITTEN SUCCINCTLY
cold wind (2 syllables)
cross tall grass (3 syllables)
waves goodbye (3 syllables)
You don't always get rid of (the). Sometimes you need it so the haiku doesn't sound like a telegram or a list. You have to read it to yourself and make sure it sounds good.
EXAMPLE
cold wind (2 syllables)
cross the tall grass (4 syllables)
waves goodbye (3 syllables)
The haiku can be less than 17 syllables BUT not over 17 syllables.
HAIKU is a Japanese very short unrhymed poem that uses imagistic language to express the essence of a deeply felt moment in time. It resonates on a deeper level, leaving the reader enlightened and making an insightful connection between the top two lines and the last one, called the SATORI. HAIKU uses a dash to pause before the SATORI.. Haiku is about nature and it alludes to a season of the year. In Japan, haiku is written in 17 syllables and three lines ( 5/7/5) but in English is 17 syllables OR LESS because English syllables are longer than Japanese syllables. Avoid capitalization (except proper names) and punctuation; keep alliteration to a minimum. Lines should be connected grammatically to improve the flow of thought.
click here to read Haiku Society of America, HAIKU EXAMPLES
click here to read Haiku Society of America HAIKU RULES
click here to read why is 5/7/5 OR LESS rule
Modern Haiku
Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my poems.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason." - Novalis
pictures from pinterest
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