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Senryu Suite
One Thousand Cranes
: ~ In The Dark ~ by Gypsy Blue Rose
Fiction - 17 syllables or less - 3 title - 6/4/4 - 4/5/5 - 4/5/7 - 5/6/6 - 5/5/3 - ending 3

In the Dark
 

I'm back at our cafe
looking for you
but you're not there

the sun shines on
but all I can see
are dark clouds afar

when I find you
you're with Delilah
so I stay back midst the crowd

watching you kiss her
my lips burn and I try
but I can't let you go

you're taking her home
and you don't see me
standing here

 
 
In the Dark
 
 

 

Author Notes
Fiction - Senryu Suite 17 syllables or Less

SENRYU is a Japanese poetic form similar to haiku. It's written in 3 lines with 17 syllables OR LESS usually in a shot/long/short form. Senryu is about human foibles while haiku tend to be about nature. Senryu doesn't need a season word (kigo) but it's okay if you do. It never rhymes. It uses imagery.

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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.

Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." Atticus

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