wane into you
entangled in your dark pain —
that I want to fix
but I'm trapped in my own hell
held down by my past's chains
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Author Notes
TANKA is a Japanese unrhymed love poem having about 12 to 31 syllables usually arranged in five lines. The first English-speaking poets imitated the Japanese models of 5-7-5-7-7 syllabic structure in five lines, but because Japanese syllables are shorter than English syllables the poems were too wordy and choppy. The beginning two lines are descriptive and image-focused, and the third line serves as a transition to the bottom two lines which are reflective using metaphor, simile, or personification. The subject matter varies, but most tanka are emotionally stirring or profound, and many are about love. Tanka originated in the seventh century in the Japanese Imperial Court, where women and men engaged in courtship. click here if you want to read modern tanka examples === click here to read Tanka Society of America === click here if you want to read modern tanka rules
Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason." - Novalis
Painting: "Ashus, Forever Forlorn", the story doesn't relate to my poem, I just liked it. Found it on Pinterest.com
Her story: Ashus is a mythical goddess. She had been abducted by a pack of demons and treated like a slave. Her unwavering faith in her gods didn't save her. Her alluring beauty had brought this horrific fate and salvation would never come.
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