four million
salty waves between them —
sprinkled with her tears
down under the same moon
and brilliant silver stars
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Author Notes
Australia is known as 'the land Down Under' for its position in the southern hemisphere.
TANKA is a Japanese poetic form that originated in the Japanese Imperial Court, where men and women engaged in courtship would exchange tanka. The form was created 1,200 years ago. Like haiku, it's written in a succinct manner in 31 syllables (5/7/5/7/7) OR LESS in a short/long/short/long/long format because Japanese and English syllables are different. Personification, metaphor, simile are permitted in Tanka. Capitalization and punctuation should only be used when necessary. No end rhymes. click here if you want to see tanka rules -- click here if you want to see modern tanka examples -- click here if you want to read free online tanka book -- click here to read Tanka Society of America �¢?? click here to read Masterpiece Classes
Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." Atticus
TANKA is a Japanese poetic form that originated in the Japanese Imperial Court, where men and women engaged in courtship would exchange tanka. The form was created 1,200 years ago. Like haiku, it's written in a succinct manner in 31 syllables (5/7/5/7/7) OR LESS in a short/long/short/long/long format because Japanese and English syllables are different. Personification, metaphor, simile are permitted in Tanka. Capitalization and punctuation should only be used when necessary. No end rhymes. click here if you want to see tanka rules -- click here if you want to see modern tanka examples -- click here if you want to read free online tanka book -- click here to read Tanka Society of America �¢?? click here to read Masterpiece Classes
Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." Atticus
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