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Tanka Suite - 5 Lines 31 Syllables or Less Each Stanza
Tanka Collection
: Let's Pretend by Gypsy Blue Rose
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would you hold me,  
the way he used to hold me, 
tenderly and kind —
      I won't ask you about her
      on this cruel and cold night


let's pretend 
you're mine and hold my hand —
      I promise not to fuss
      about who you've been with and why 
      I just need to be held tight 


dreams dwindle and die, 
sometimes...for some of us —
      all we have left 
      is remembrance of romance
      amidst straits in dimmin light

 


 

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Author Notes
End of tanka rhyme happened organically, I didn't plan it.

TANKA is a romantic Japanese poetic form that originated in the Japanese Imperial Court, where men and women engaged in courtship would exchange tanka. The form was created 1,200 years ago. Like haiku, it's written in a succinct manner in 31 syllables (5/7/5/7/7) OR LESS in a short/long/short/long/long format because Japanese and English syllables are different. Personification, metaphor, simile are permitted in Tanka. Capitalization and punctuation should only be used when necessary. No end rhymes. click here if you want to see tanka rules -- click here if you want to see modern tanka examples -- click here if you want to read free online tanka book -- click here to read Tanka Society of America �??????�?????�????�???�??�?�¢?? click here to read Masterpiece Classes

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Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." Atticus

     

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