summer storm —
little girl holds her breath
between lightning and thunder
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Author Notes
*Thunder is the sound and lightning is the glow.
*Lightning can kill people (3,696 deaths were recorded in the U.S. between 1959 and 2003) or cause cardiac arrest.
*If you count the number of seconds between the flash of lightning and the sound of thunder you'll get the distance in miles to the lightning: 5 seconds = 1 mile, 15 seconds = 3 miles, 0 seconds = very close. Keep in mind that you should be in a safe place while counting.
HAIKU is an unrhymed Japanese poem that uses imagistic language to convey the essence of a human experience in nature. It uses a juxtaposition of two concrete images in a way that prompts the reader to make an insightful connection between the two. It alludes to a season of the year with direct words (summer, winter, autumn, spring) or indirect words (northern wind, warm breeze, harvest, Christmas, New Year, cherry blossoms, etc) The best haiku avoid the poet's views, the poet is the OBSERVER.
FORM Japanese haiku is written in 17 syllables and three lines ( 5/7/5) BUT in English is 17 syllables OR LESS. For example:
Haiku in Japanese: Furuike ya / Kawazu tobikomu / Mizu no oto (5/7/5)
Same haiku translated to English: old pond / a frog leaps in / the sound of water. (2/4/5)
AVOID punctuation, alliteration, metaphor, personification, and capital letters (proper names are okay). To pause before the satori you can use a dash, sometimes a comma is okay, but we keep punctuation to a minimum. HAIKU SOURCES click here to read TEN HAIKU TIPS --- click here to read Haiku Society of America HAIKU EXAMPLES --- click here to read Haiku Society of America HAIKU RULES --- click here to read MASTER, MATSUO BASHO Haiku Collection --- click here to read HAIKU MASTER MATSUO BASHO HISTORY --- click here to read WHY 17 OR LESS SYLLABLES --- click here to read SEASON WORDS (Kigo) List
Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason." - Novalis
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