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Tanka Suite (rules in my author notes)
A chapter in the book 2024 Gypsy's Tanka

Riding with the Ferryman

by Gypsy Blue Rose


For Dean
 
 
 

~ The Sun ~

my eyes are used to
 
  your red dawn—

I drink in the spaciousness of the sky

you come close to kiss my heart

and leave me aflame at dusk
 
 
 
 

~ The Moon ~

you play with the tides
promising you'll come back
    then you leave me behind—
when the moon is full
I feel the night

 

 
 
 

~ Death ~


my days and nights
   feel they'll go on and on—
until the ferryman comes
to carry me beyond
the moon and sun


 

 





 




The ferryman of the underworld, is responsible for transporting the souls of the deceased across the river Styx to the afterlife.

Tanka is my favorite Japanese poetic form. It's a romantic and passionate poem. It was created in the 8th century and used in the Japanese Imperial Court where lovers exchanged a tanka after a night together. The best tanka poets are women. I feel a kinship with these women tanka poets. After all this time, is still relatable.
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Rules: Tanka is a Japanese unrhymed poem having about 12 to 31 syllables usually arranged in five lines. The syllable count is 31 syllables OR LESS. Japanese use a 5-7-5-7-7 syllabic structure but English are usually less syllables than that because Japanese syllables are shorter than English syllables. The third line is usually used to transition from the top descriptive lines to the image-focused reflective metaphor, simile, or personification for the closing lines. The subject matter varies, but most tanka are emotionally stirring or profound, and many are about love.


click here if you want to read modern tanka examples


click here to read Tanka Society of America


click here if you want to read modern tanka rules

Thank you very much for your time and kind review.

Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid.

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