General Poetry posted October 17, 2020

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Six-stanza Loop Poem

Redwoods in Sunlight

by CrystieCookie999

This forest is full of whispers and rustling
Rustling of raccoons, curious and hidden,
Hidden like young fawns, or games of children
Children whose yearly shadows grow, unbidden

Unbidden, the trees all stand to pray
Pray for protection, from profit-minded men, see
See those who desire an empire of lumber
Lumber which lives in the death of each tree.

Tree after tree knows a song of deep mist
Mist that rises from Pacific thoughts
Thoughts which melt into early morning
Morning of waiting, near moist, mossy spots.

Spots of sunlight lie like golden hope
Hope of a century, or millennia, a dream
Dream of a glistening, rain-drenched spring.
Spring that brings birdsong to gladden and gleam

Gleam with a melody, better than silence,
Silence which melts into eyes of each deer
Deer that step onward to afternoon peace
Peace which pervades the weariest here.

Here every redwood remembers their God
God who remembers creating this site,
Site of a morning, the seventh day's season,
Season of rest, on a Sabbath day bright.

Loop Poetry Contest contest entry


First stanza has abcb rhyme scheme. Then I have defe, ghih, jklk, mnon, pqrq. I have not been to see the California Redwoods in the United States of America since 2007, but a common comment is that it feels like a deep silence creates a sense of reverence there.
Thanks to Paul G. for a really stunning photo.
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