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Comment from jason381202
Very moving poem. I'm a firm believer in our lord and savior. I really appreciated reading this thank you for posting it.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Very moving poem. I'm a firm believer in our lord and savior. I really appreciated reading this thank you for posting it.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Thank you Jason for your kind, supportive review. I appreciate your dropping and your generosity, blessings, Roy.
Comment from RGstar
I like the way you have retracted back to the first stanza with your last stanza.
You used the plight of nature well in homing in on your thesis.
An event that follows mankind regardless of the religion one chooses.
Your thesis is well delivered , along with your extensive author's notes in connection with faith.
A good write , Roy.
Best wishes,
RGstar
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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I like the way you have retracted back to the first stanza with your last stanza.
You used the plight of nature well in homing in on your thesis.
An event that follows mankind regardless of the religion one chooses.
Your thesis is well delivered , along with your extensive author's notes in connection with faith.
A good write , Roy.
Best wishes,
RGstar
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Thank you for this wonderful, comprehensive and in depth review! Blessings, Roy.
Comment from El Coyote
Such wonderful rhyme and meter. A beautiful story that circles back for completion. I really liked your key question, "I wonder why, this Saviour's name, Is cursed by man, held in disdain." Nice flow. Nice message.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Such wonderful rhyme and meter. A beautiful story that circles back for completion. I really liked your key question, "I wonder why, this Saviour's name, Is cursed by man, held in disdain." Nice flow. Nice message.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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What a wonderful, kind, and generous review, I thank you dropping by! Blessings, Review.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Roy
When I first saw the pix, I instantly flashed in my mind, Mel Gibson's 'Passion of the Christ' movie. I hate sub-titles, though for this movie I sat in awe! I even have the DVD.
Absolutely spot on pix for your beautiful poem too.
I'm afraid we'll never see the day when someone isn't trying to undo Christianity - outlaw it. Such a sin.
Blessings my friend.
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Hi Roy
When I first saw the pix, I instantly flashed in my mind, Mel Gibson's 'Passion of the Christ' movie. I hate sub-titles, though for this movie I sat in awe! I even have the DVD.
Absolutely spot on pix for your beautiful poem too.
I'm afraid we'll never see the day when someone isn't trying to undo Christianity - outlaw it. Such a sin.
Blessings my friend.
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Thank you Jax, I think it does look like Mel Gibson's Passion, but you'll have to ask the artist! I just know it was appropriate for the poem! Thank you, we seem to be bumping into one another, but thank you you have been so supportive and I appreciate it! Blessings, Roy.
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of rhyming couplets
great use of illustrative examples
good alliteration in bound, betrayed
I love the way the final stanza picks up the imagery from earlier in the poem
This is beautifully composed with a powerful spiritual message
Brooke
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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solid use of rhyming couplets
great use of illustrative examples
good alliteration in bound, betrayed
I love the way the final stanza picks up the imagery from earlier in the poem
This is beautifully composed with a powerful spiritual message
Brooke
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Thank you Brooke, you are so kind and gentle and comprehensive in your reviews and I appreciate it, blessings,Roy.
Comment from beautyseeker
beautiful poem of our Lord jesus and his dying love for us. good aabb rhyme in 8 syllable count (is it trochaic tetrameter? not sure) can be tricky. beautifully done. ( i havent been on fanstory reviews nor posting in a while, every once in a blue moon due to my ipad out, bec I still often on bedrest.and hardly get to computer. hope to be back in the swing of posting/reviewing if things get fixed)
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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beautiful poem of our Lord jesus and his dying love for us. good aabb rhyme in 8 syllable count (is it trochaic tetrameter? not sure) can be tricky. beautifully done. ( i havent been on fanstory reviews nor posting in a while, every once in a blue moon due to my ipad out, bec I still often on bedrest.and hardly get to computer. hope to be back in the swing of posting/reviewing if things get fixed)
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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I'm not sure Bec, I'm very much " unchurched " in the subtleties of poetic form, I'm only an " instinctive poet "! have branched out into a few different types, but I much prefer the type you read here, the syllable count was quite deliberate however! I enjoyed your writing, so I look forward to more freedom for you in the future! I'm "surgically" attached to my IPad so I know what you mean! Thank you for your amazing review and 6, I appreciate it, dear sister, blessings and prayers. Roy.
Comment from Connie Vigil
This is an excellent poetic example of our Lord's reason for his death on the cross. The rhythm and rhyming is excellent. The poem thought provoking and biblically sound. Nice work I had to give it an excellent rating! Keep on penning! Connie
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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This is an excellent poetic example of our Lord's reason for his death on the cross. The rhythm and rhyming is excellent. The poem thought provoking and biblically sound. Nice work I had to give it an excellent rating! Keep on penning! Connie
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Thank you for your wonderful review and high rating, I appreciate it. Blessings, Roy
Comment from JavaJunkie
Beautifully written with a message that is close to my heart. Your rhymed quatrains flow nicely with a good rhythm, although I did stumble a bit on this line:
to die for all, said, "finished, done."
I wonder if it would flow better if you added he said or it is finished.
Just a thought.
I think your words are well penned and your message is beautifully clear.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Beautifully written with a message that is close to my heart. Your rhymed quatrains flow nicely with a good rhythm, although I did stumble a bit on this line:
to die for all, said, "finished, done."
I wonder if it would flow better if you added he said or it is finished.
Just a thought.
I think your words are well penned and your message is beautifully clear.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Thank you for your observations and supportive review, my only defence is I needed to rhyme with son, that's all I could come up with, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Zue65
The message is timely and relevant, celebrating Christ's passion on the cross and His sacrifice to save mankind. Thanks for sharing a poem that evangelizes God's love for mankind.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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The message is timely and relevant, celebrating Christ's passion on the cross and His sacrifice to save mankind. Thanks for sharing a poem that evangelizes God's love for mankind.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Thank you, this is an excellent review,I appreciate it, your generosity is great also, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
A lovely faith poem written with true feeling. Last line of second stanza 'On a cross is/he hung? small typo? or am I misreading. Whatever, this is well written and gives a solemn message. Very sadly dramatic picture. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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A lovely faith poem written with true feeling. Last line of second stanza 'On a cross is/he hung? small typo? or am I misreading. Whatever, this is well written and gives a solemn message. Very sadly dramatic picture. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much Dorothy, for your indepth, encouraging and generous review. Blessings, Roy.
