No more cobwebs
Cobwebs writing prompt11 total reviews
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hello zanya,
What a cute story! Reminded me of a scene from 101 Dalmations.
Best wishes for the contest. Really enjoyed!
Love,
Sonali :)
owner anywhere(,) (s)o he decided to make friends
He was ill-at-ease. .. hyphens not needed
" Brandy, Brandy(,) come here, you naughty boy(.)" (They) seemed to come
. He loves to make new friends(,)" intoned the lady ... intoned is not quite the right word here (check dic for exact meaning) ... suggest: said
over the left eye(,)" Muriel continued.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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Hello zanya,
What a cute story! Reminded me of a scene from 101 Dalmations.
Best wishes for the contest. Really enjoyed!
Love,
Sonali :)
owner anywhere(,) (s)o he decided to make friends
He was ill-at-ease. .. hyphens not needed
" Brandy, Brandy(,) come here, you naughty boy(.)" (They) seemed to come
. He loves to make new friends(,)" intoned the lady ... intoned is not quite the right word here (check dic for exact meaning) ... suggest: said
over the left eye(,)" Muriel continued.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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Thanks for a great review and for useful suggestions zanya
Comment from c_lucas
One cannot cease living because of the death of his mate. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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One cannot cease living because of the death of his mate. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Thanks for reading and for a great review zanya
You're welcome, Zanya. Charlie
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a nice story that reaches into reality for its storyline. Many people cling to their common pets after their significant other passes as a last connection with him/her. Good write.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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This is a nice story that reaches into reality for its storyline. Many people cling to their common pets after their significant other passes as a last connection with him/her. Good write.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Thanks for an engaging review - nice line'reaches into reality'. zanya
Comment from Charlene0513
This story does not strike me to have much creativity in it as the talk of the story was mainly about your dogs and you never brought cobwebs into play until your last line. It lacks action and description over all.
Charlene
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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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This story does not strike me to have much creativity in it as the talk of the story was mainly about your dogs and you never brought cobwebs into play until your last line. It lacks action and description over all.
Charlene
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Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Thank you for reading and engaging zanya
Comment from nelliesellie
I like the story. John's first wife set up a chance for him to have second love. Labradors have a special ability for affection. It is contagious. John's love for the dogs is going to grow as he gets to know the purple haired lady. Great work. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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I like the story. John's first wife set up a chance for him to have second love. Labradors have a special ability for affection. It is contagious. John's love for the dogs is going to grow as he gets to know the purple haired lady. Great work. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Thanks for a great review zanya
Comment from Spiritual Echo
I loved this story, right till the end and then I got a little befuddled. Was he calling to have someone take his dog away? Yikes, he didn't even run after the pooch and try to get him on his own.
You really developed this story nicely and had me striding along, silently watching the story unfold.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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I loved this story, right till the end and then I got a little befuddled. Was he calling to have someone take his dog away? Yikes, he didn't even run after the pooch and try to get him on his own.
You really developed this story nicely and had me striding along, silently watching the story unfold.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Delighted you enjoyed it - thanks for reviewing zanya
Comment from Dean Kuch
My best friend is a nine-year-old Chihuahua named Gidget, and my wife is still very much alive. So, I immediately connected with your John character from the very beginning of the story, Author 'X'.
It is odd how someone, often a stranger, can come into our lives unannounced, and cause an epiphany. Muriel did that for John, and I'm sure the new life he'll embark upon will serve him far better than wallowing in grief and misery.
Well done, and best of luck to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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My best friend is a nine-year-old Chihuahua named Gidget, and my wife is still very much alive. So, I immediately connected with your John character from the very beginning of the story, Author 'X'.
It is odd how someone, often a stranger, can come into our lives unannounced, and cause an epiphany. Muriel did that for John, and I'm sure the new life he'll embark upon will serve him far better than wallowing in grief and misery.
Well done, and best of luck to you in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Wow when the reader connects with our sentiment isn't that the raison d'etre of all artistic expression - thank you indeed for an engaging review zanya
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Well, I happen to think so. You're very welcome, Zanya.
Comment from mfowler
That's a really nice take on the prompt. John is grieving and it's his dog which keeps him afloat after Marge's death. A chance meeting leads back to a connection among him, Muriel, Brandy and Marge. He realises it's time to shake the cobwebs of grief from his life. Well written, emotionally satisfying and original!
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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That's a really nice take on the prompt. John is grieving and it's his dog which keeps him afloat after Marge's death. A chance meeting leads back to a connection among him, Muriel, Brandy and Marge. He realises it's time to shake the cobwebs of grief from his life. Well written, emotionally satisfying and original!
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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So glad you enjoyed reading it - thanks for reviewing zanya
Comment from adewpearl
Brandy, come here - add comma for direct address
Nice to meet you, Muriel - add comma
Have you always loved animals, John - add comma
What a lovely story with a perfect ending of hope and renewal, perfect for this Easter morning :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Brandy, come here - add comma for direct address
Nice to meet you, Muriel - add comma
Have you always loved animals, John - add comma
What a lovely story with a perfect ending of hope and renewal, perfect for this Easter morning :-) Brooke
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Thanks for reading and reviewing and the suggestions zanya
Comment from Ben Colder
Interesting cobweb story. I knock down cobwebs with a broom and then I read your interesting piece. Thanks for teaching me what the contest meant. Well done. Shalom .
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Interesting cobweb story. I knock down cobwebs with a broom and then I read your interesting piece. Thanks for teaching me what the contest meant. Well done. Shalom .
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Yes thanks for the interesting review and all the angles on the ubiquitous cobweb LOL
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voted for you. You are allowed to vote for yourself also.
