Comment from 9999pool

Excellent

A beautiful wrtie about the rainbows in the bubbles as the happy children chase and grap them.
In a second, the rainbow is gone and leave a soapy feeling on of what was left but not to hold in our hands.
The rainbow will only appear briefly and the life of the bubbles just as short. Both a product of nature and this write captures that essence very well.
Congrats on the win.
Cheerio, hugs, Rithcie. :))

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014

Thanks for reading my haiku, Ritchie, and for your great review. I love watching kids chase after bubble rainbows. Thanks for your comments and your kind congratulations.
Smiles,
Karyn : )

reply by 9999pool on 23-Apr-2014

Smiles. :)). My pleasure.
Hugs, Ritchie, :))

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

I was too late to vote, but thankfully it didn't matter! Well done, Indy, what a clever one this is, and it's fun too. It was such a pleasure to read. :) Sandra

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014

Thank you so much, Sandra, for such a great review for my haiku. I'm glad you enjoyed it and thank you for your kind comments.
Smiles,
Karyn : )

Comment from honeytree

Excellent

So much has been said in very few words here.

What a treat for a young child to experience this.

Brings back memories when I was a child.

honey tree

I have no six

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014

Thank you for taking the time to read and review my haiku, honey tree. Thanks so much for your kind comments, and I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.
Smiles,
Indy : )

Comment from healfromwithin

Excellent

bubbles float (3)
on sunny afternoon (6)
child grabs rainbows (4)

You have nice imagery on a non-conforming (or modern, non-traditional) Haiku.

Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014

Thank you, healfromwithin, for taking the time to read and share your kind comments for my haiku. Thank you for your review and I'm glad you liked the imagery.
Smiles,
Indy : )

Comment from MagKing

Excellent

Bubble float on Sunny afternoon, child grabs rainbow.
Even if I do not partake or had never partaken in Haiku, I believe, or I have seen previous one with a particular syllable scheme. It could be 3-5-3 or so, but yours is without order. Yet you won the contest.
I suspect, I'm missing something...Mind telling me if there be any?

MagKing

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014

Thank you for your kind review for my haiku, MagKing, and for selecting the poem to read. If you read haiku, you will see there are many requirements for the form that sometimes are ignored by the contest organizers and many who write it. According to the big published writers of haiku, the poem can be 17 or less syllables (many of the contests here will state specific syllable count like 5-7-5 or 3-5-3 but in reality, it can be anything as long as it is 17 or less total syllable and the lines are short, long, short), should have two grammatically connected images with a line of insight or an opportunity for the reader to image further. There is usually no punctuation, only capitalization for proper nouns, and no personification of winter. There are some other rules, but those are the basic ones. It's a challenge and fun form to write, and I hope you give it a try sometime. Thanks for asking your question and I hope I answered. If you want to know more, please feel free to PM and I will try my best.
Smiles,
Indy : )

Comment from A Jesterstear

Excellent

Congratulations on winning the competition. It is very difficult to tell a story in such few words. Your Haiku took me back to my childhood where I chased bubbles in the sunshine and they did have all the colours of the rainbow. Well done. AJ.

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014

Hi A J. Thanks so much for taking the time to read my haiku and for your kind review and comments. I appreciate your congratulations on the contest win, and I'm pleased you enjoyed the poem.
Smiles,
Indy : )

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi Indiana...

~ We were neighbors... I was born a buckeye, forty miles from Ft. Wayne, near Berne and Decatur, and then transplanted to the AZ desert...!

~ I like this fresh approach with the rainbow and bubbles...

~ High praise to for being a nurse in a NICU...! My preemie twin grandsons were born two months early 16 months ago... Wow - what an eye opening experience... You do such wonderful work in those units - has to be heartbreaking sometimes...

~ Within six weeks they were able to come home, and now you'd never know they had such a rough start... Bless you, and all the nurses...!!

Keep Smilin'.... Jax

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014

Hello and it's great to meet you, Jax. Thank you for taking the time to read and review my haiku. I appreciate your kind comments and I'm glad you enjoyed it.

I'm so glad your grandsons did well in NICU and are now growing and getting your love. I recently retired after 35 years in NICU and I sure do miss the babies.

Thanks and smiles,
Indy : )

Comment from thequeencatalyst

Excellent

This was a very cute, simple poem and I just wanted to let you know that I enjoyed it very much :) Congratulations on such a lovely addition to your portfolio.

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014

Thank you for your review and comments for my haiku, Jasmine. I appreciate your time to read, and I'm glad you enjoyed.
Smiles,
Indy : )

Comment from Petriesan

Excellent

children do love rainbows and bubbles. Heck, so do I, but my wife think I am still a child, so who knows.

Beautiful imagery ion the piece

good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014

Thanks for taking this time to read my poem and share your thoughts, Petriesan. I'm glad you enjoyed and thanks for liking the imagery.
Smiles,
Indy : )

Comment from zanya

Excellent

A wonderful reflection in this short Haiku format on the magic and mystery of the world of the child as it grows and learns and discovers -

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014

Thank you, zanya, for your kind review and comments for my haiku. I'm very appreciative for your time to read and share your thoughts.
Smiles,
Indy : )