Alleluia!
Life can change...when you change27 total reviews
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Loanna...
Beautifully stated with the photo helping to pull the words of you poetry together...
Blessings....
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
Hi Loanna...
Beautifully stated with the photo helping to pull the words of you poetry together...
Blessings....
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
Comment from kiwijenny
What a hope filled poem. I love it
Lift your head and sing your song.
Our Savior lives and leads-
us to a life attainable.
We grow from planted seeds!
Shout Alleluia! to our King...
bring all your problems here.
Now plant them so they grow and change
tomorrow without fear!
This is what we are studying about in Bible class ....The seed Promise by Aubrey Johnson...
Love you
God bless
What a hope filled poem. I love it
Lift your head and sing your song.
Our Savior lives and leads-
us to a life attainable.
We grow from planted seeds!
Shout Alleluia! to our King...
bring all your problems here.
Now plant them so they grow and change
tomorrow without fear!
This is what we are studying about in Bible class ....The seed Promise by Aubrey Johnson...
Love you
God bless
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
Comment from Willowsong
Excellent portrayal of a developing spiritual aspect in oneself. Nice metaphor usage comparing spiritual growth with a planted seed. Artwork compliments the piece well. Good luck in the contest!
Excellent portrayal of a developing spiritual aspect in oneself. Nice metaphor usage comparing spiritual growth with a planted seed. Artwork compliments the piece well. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
Comment from visionary1234
Nice use of enjambment here Loanna, especially for your last couple of lines. I wouldn't use a dash in the next combination though, as it holds up the 'flow'?
Our Savior lives and leads-(- delete)
us to a life attainable.
:)Sharyn
Nice use of enjambment here Loanna, especially for your last couple of lines. I wouldn't use a dash in the next combination though, as it holds up the 'flow'?
Our Savior lives and leads-(- delete)
us to a life attainable.
:)Sharyn
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
Comment from tfawcus
I like the idea of planting problems, not to grow new problems from, but to watch them metamorphose into things of beauty as the Lord takes these dark things from the soil and raises them to the glorious beauty and colour of new life.
I like the idea of planting problems, not to grow new problems from, but to watch them metamorphose into things of beauty as the Lord takes these dark things from the soil and raises them to the glorious beauty and colour of new life.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
Comment from RGstar
A good combination of faith and nature...and so should it be.
A beautiful image and and true words of faith.
I wish you a great Easter,
RGstar
A good combination of faith and nature...and so should it be.
A beautiful image and and true words of faith.
I wish you a great Easter,
RGstar
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
Comment from c_lucas
One should show the strength and faith when confronted with a negative incidence. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
One should show the strength and faith when confronted with a negative incidence. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
Comment from MagKing
A good one I must say.
I can see the end rhymes between the second and the last line in each of the stanza. But this is not so with the second stanza. Rather, it breaks the meter and places the piece out of contest. I suggest you look into it and edit to a four lines like the others before the next reviewer.
No offense...
MagKing
A good one I must say.
I can see the end rhymes between the second and the last line in each of the stanza. But this is not so with the second stanza. Rather, it breaks the meter and places the piece out of contest. I suggest you look into it and edit to a four lines like the others before the next reviewer.
No offense...
MagKing
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
Comment from jEliza
Your poem show that fear is just a passing feeling when we call on the strength of hope, love and giving back.
Technically; The rhythm flows well in the first verse, trip up a bit during the third and fourth lines of the second verse.
This just reminds us that tripping is also a learning possibility! Good luck
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Your poem show that fear is just a passing feeling when we call on the strength of hope, love and giving back.
Technically; The rhythm flows well in the first verse, trip up a bit during the third and fourth lines of the second verse.
This just reminds us that tripping is also a learning possibility! Good luck
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
Comment from TAB_that's me
This poem has a strong message of your faith and it is a good entry for the spiritual writing prompt. Good luck in the contest.
Teresa
This poem has a strong message of your faith and it is a good entry for the spiritual writing prompt. Good luck in the contest.
Teresa
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014