Wrinkles
coming home ... to say goodbye ...92 total reviews
Comment from Melodie Michelle
Excellent poem my friend! The storyline was very interesting and held my attention throughout the piece;-)
Thanks for sharing and may God bless you and your family this Christmas!
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2021
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Excellent poem my friend! The storyline was very interesting and held my attention throughout the piece;-)
Thanks for sharing and may God bless you and your family this Christmas!
Comment Written 26-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2021
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Thank you so much, Melodie - this is an old piece, so it was fun to go back to re-read it! Happy Holidays! :)Sharyn
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Comment from GregoryCody
Oh man. I'm taken aback. This is phenomenal. I mean really. I already voted for it but I hadn't had a chance to write the review. I read it last night. It brings so many emotions out. I mean seriously this is a PERFECT piece. Not simple rhyming bland poetry. It's a story written with amazing flow and a phenomenal poetic voice. Fantastic descriptions. Unique. Such vivid imagery. Your phrases, coupling of certain words. I mean wow. I LOVE going along for the ride. I crave it. Crave your words. Wow wow wow S.
Even the landscape stood at attention. WOW. That sticks with me. AWESOME.
Skeletons of roses crumble. ??? How did you come up with that. PERFECT.
BRAVO. I can feel your heart here. TEN STARS.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Oh man. I'm taken aback. This is phenomenal. I mean really. I already voted for it but I hadn't had a chance to write the review. I read it last night. It brings so many emotions out. I mean seriously this is a PERFECT piece. Not simple rhyming bland poetry. It's a story written with amazing flow and a phenomenal poetic voice. Fantastic descriptions. Unique. Such vivid imagery. Your phrases, coupling of certain words. I mean wow. I LOVE going along for the ride. I crave it. Crave your words. Wow wow wow S.
Even the landscape stood at attention. WOW. That sticks with me. AWESOME.
Skeletons of roses crumble. ??? How did you come up with that. PERFECT.
BRAVO. I can feel your heart here. TEN STARS.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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oh YEAH!! I'm delighted that you found this one Greg - I was hoping you would! We do enjoy our crafting of EXACTLY the words we want, hmm?
Bless you, big time, for taking the time to review - and, of course, a sixer doesn't hurt either!
:):):)S
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a sad story of a rich woman show thought her things made her rich not her family. He seams like she was a cold person when you were young. Now that she is old and probably has Altzheimers she seems to see that people are more important than things.
The format and repetition seems to enhance the emotion. It shows sadness, loneliness and anger. But also some love.
Congrats on your ranking
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 27-May-2014
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This is a sad story of a rich woman show thought her things made her rich not her family. He seams like she was a cold person when you were young. Now that she is old and probably has Altzheimers she seems to see that people are more important than things.
The format and repetition seems to enhance the emotion. It shows sadness, loneliness and anger. But also some love.
Congrats on your ranking
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 27-May-2014
reply by the author on 27-May-2014
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thx so much dp! :)Sharyn
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You are so very welcome, Sharyn.
Joan
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. I love the poem. Our parents were raised in a different age with values that seem strange to us. We can often take their values personally. Older women were raised to try to have the perfect house. That was the value society placed on them. Children often think their mother thought more of the material things. We learn to forgive their values as we age. Great work.
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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I love the picture. I love the poem. Our parents were raised in a different age with values that seem strange to us. We can often take their values personally. Older women were raised to try to have the perfect house. That was the value society placed on them. Children often think their mother thought more of the material things. We learn to forgive their values as we age. Great work.
Comment Written 23-May-2014
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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We do indeed, Nellie - you're spot on. And I've had to go through that process myself!
:)Sharyn
Comment from Adri7enne
Things have a way of coming to a complete turn around, don't they? I love how you show the changes in an aging body and mind through describing the metamorphosis of the house and its particular aging process. It's true that priorities change as we approch the transition. Well done. Good luck in the contest. Would be good to see a woman win that contest for a change! Yeah!
reply by the author on 22-May-2014
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Things have a way of coming to a complete turn around, don't they? I love how you show the changes in an aging body and mind through describing the metamorphosis of the house and its particular aging process. It's true that priorities change as we approch the transition. Well done. Good luck in the contest. Would be good to see a woman win that contest for a change! Yeah!
Comment Written 22-May-2014
reply by the author on 22-May-2014
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I have my fingers crossed Adrienne! Thank you so much, my dear, for being 'moved' by my piece. So much appreciated!
:)Sharyn
Comment from Jean Lutz
I think we all become an echo of our mother at some time. This is a timely reading for me. Now that I have reached my twilight years, I am trying to get my life in order. Yet if I fail I believe I've set an example. Best wishes with your entry.
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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I think we all become an echo of our mother at some time. This is a timely reading for me. Now that I have reached my twilight years, I am trying to get my life in order. Yet if I fail I believe I've set an example. Best wishes with your entry.
Comment Written 21-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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I'm 61, Jeanie ... and believe me, it gives me great food for thought when I look in the mirror and see my mother reflected back at me sometimes!
:)Sharyn
Comment from LoannaLois
I 'm crying like the baby I feel I am right now. The poignancy of this is usurped only by this meaning woven into such a poem. A six
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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I 'm crying like the baby I feel I am right now. The poignancy of this is usurped only by this meaning woven into such a poem. A six
Comment Written 21-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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Loanna, thank you so much for letting my piece 'touch' your heart. It was written from my heart.
Blessings,
Sharyn
Comment from michaelcahill
Congratulations on your nomination. It is so deserved. One of the best and most touching pieces I've read here in a while. The form of this is perfection. Just the right words floating down at just the right time. So thoughtfully put together. It adds to the meaning. Well done, mikey
reply by the author on 20-May-2014
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Congratulations on your nomination. It is so deserved. One of the best and most touching pieces I've read here in a while. The form of this is perfection. Just the right words floating down at just the right time. So thoughtfully put together. It adds to the meaning. Well done, mikey
Comment Written 20-May-2014
reply by the author on 20-May-2014
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Thank you so much, Mikey! This is one of my favorite pieces so I'm glad you 'got' it too.
:)Sharyn
Comment from Victoria K
Engaging, touching, haunting, evocative - this poem is all of these and more. I think the structure of the poem is excellent. The separate lines with the words cascading downward really builds a sense of momentum and echoes the sentiment behind the words.
It brought a tear to my eye, beautifully written.
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Engaging, touching, haunting, evocative - this poem is all of these and more. I think the structure of the poem is excellent. The separate lines with the words cascading downward really builds a sense of momentum and echoes the sentiment behind the words.
It brought a tear to my eye, beautifully written.
Comment Written 19-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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oh Victoria I'm so delighted that you read my poem and have written such a lovely response to it! Thank you so much! And thank you, of course, for awarding one of your precious sixes! I'm honored.
Blessings,
Sharyn
Comment from honeytree
I love both the art work and words written
The words written told of the closeness
Between mother and child in a special way.
I loved the closeness within the last few words.
honey tree
I have no six left
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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I love both the art work and words written
The words written told of the closeness
Between mother and child in a special way.
I loved the closeness within the last few words.
honey tree
I have no six left
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much honeytree! :)Sharyn
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Glad you liked the review.
honeytree
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I loved what you wrote.
honey tree
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I loved what you wrote
honeytree
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I led what you wrote.
honey tree
