Miraculous (acrostic)
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Comment from thequeencatalyst
Hi there! While I really enjoyed this piece, and the story and meaning it portrayed, the font was slightly difficult to decipher. That's all I noticed though, aside from that this piece is lovely :) Congratulations on adding such a great poem to your portfolio! Happy Easter
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Hi there! While I really enjoyed this piece, and the story and meaning it portrayed, the font was slightly difficult to decipher. That's all I noticed though, aside from that this piece is lovely :) Congratulations on adding such a great poem to your portfolio! Happy Easter
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Thank you! :)
Comment from Petriesan
killer picture, blended into the poem wonderfully
call to heaven until they call back? wonderful thoughts
seeing without evidence. . faith?
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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killer picture, blended into the poem wonderfully
call to heaven until they call back? wonderful thoughts
seeing without evidence. . faith?
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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That's how I meant it, yes. Thank you for the kind review! :)
Comment from Rainbowsofhappiness
I love the brilliant photography in the accompanying photo. The sun indeed is a symbol of a miraculous sight! The writer uses precisely chosen word choices to enhance the impact of the meaning behind the word miraculous. My one revision would be to line up the sentences so the word miraculous stands out immediately to the reader. I like how the writer has chosen to weave a rhythmic pattern into the acrostic uniting the lines and making them flow smoothly as a single unit. The meter of this poem is consistent creating an abab pattern in lines with letters M thru A of the word miraculous. Then changing the meter to create an abba rhyming pattern. The tone of the poem is grateful, introspective, and reflective. Nicely worded acrostic that incorporates vivid word choices to convey the writer's vision to the reader.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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I love the brilliant photography in the accompanying photo. The sun indeed is a symbol of a miraculous sight! The writer uses precisely chosen word choices to enhance the impact of the meaning behind the word miraculous. My one revision would be to line up the sentences so the word miraculous stands out immediately to the reader. I like how the writer has chosen to weave a rhythmic pattern into the acrostic uniting the lines and making them flow smoothly as a single unit. The meter of this poem is consistent creating an abab pattern in lines with letters M thru A of the word miraculous. Then changing the meter to create an abba rhyming pattern. The tone of the poem is grateful, introspective, and reflective. Nicely worded acrostic that incorporates vivid word choices to convey the writer's vision to the reader.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the in depth review. It is highly appreciated. You're the second person who has recommended that I left justify the poem so the word is clearly visible. I will do so. Thank you! :)
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You are most welcome! I'm always happy to help a fellow writer as I have been lucky enough to find some kind individuals along the way who have helped me hone me craft! Have a lovely day!
Comment from ELumpkins
I like Acrostic poems, this one is well done. I like it because it prettty well covers the function of the sun. It rhymes very well and is an easy read.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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I like Acrostic poems, this one is well done. I like it because it prettty well covers the function of the sun. It rhymes very well and is an easy read.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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THanks so much!
Comment from royowen
A clever acrostic revealing the beauties o f heaven. I particularly like the last line which says, see without evidence! This should do quite well in this contest! Well done, Blessings, Roy!
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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A clever acrostic revealing the beauties o f heaven. I particularly like the last line which says, see without evidence! This should do quite well in this contest! Well done, Blessings, Roy!
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Contest is over! But, ah well. :)
Thanks for the kind review! :)
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Bad luck. Oh well!
Comment from visionary1234
Goodness, I was turning upside down to find the acrostic at first - you might want to left justify this piece to make for an easier appreciation? But what a lovely, truly spiritual and unforced piece - it's hard to do acrostics well and you've pulled it off!
:)Sharyn
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Goodness, I was turning upside down to find the acrostic at first - you might want to left justify this piece to make for an easier appreciation? But what a lovely, truly spiritual and unforced piece - it's hard to do acrostics well and you've pulled it off!
:)Sharyn
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much! :)
Comment from ArtGal
You sure do have a way with words, that's a definite! Your choice is good considering it's an acrostic, not easy to do. I really like:
Move beyond reasons
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See without evidence
These talk to me about just believing by simple faith. Very well written, and I wish you the best in this contest. . .Sharon
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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You sure do have a way with words, that's a definite! Your choice is good considering it's an acrostic, not easy to do. I really like:
Move beyond reasons
and
See without evidence
These talk to me about just believing by simple faith. Very well written, and I wish you the best in this contest. . .Sharon
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Contest is over, but ah well. Thanks so much for the review! :)
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So sorry, but they sure are hard to win. But keep trying!!!
Comment from RGstar
A very philosophical write, with an element of truth surrounding it, eve if it sounds like a proverb.
A great understanding of thought and a good acrostic write.
Well done,
Happy Easter.
RGstar
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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A very philosophical write, with an element of truth surrounding it, eve if it sounds like a proverb.
A great understanding of thought and a good acrostic write.
Well done,
Happy Easter.
RGstar
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Thanks for the review! :)
Comment from MagKing
What a touching piece.
Beautifully inspired and well penned down.
Am sure you must have taken time in fasting and meditating before coming up with a piece as this?
This is impeccable to have been made an acrostic yet rhyming at the same time.
See without evidence? Or evidence without seeing and then receiving(That is what faith is about). Would you mind explaining yours?
Good luck in the contest
MagKing
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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What a touching piece.
Beautifully inspired and well penned down.
Am sure you must have taken time in fasting and meditating before coming up with a piece as this?
This is impeccable to have been made an acrostic yet rhyming at the same time.
See without evidence? Or evidence without seeing and then receiving(That is what faith is about). Would you mind explaining yours?
Good luck in the contest
MagKing
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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The ''see without evidence'' is referencing what the Bible says about faith being the ''substance of things hoped for, the evidence of things not seen''. Thank you for your thoughtful review and God Bless! :)
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That is why I said Evidence without seeing.
If you say see without evidence, you're just reversing the case.
No offense
MagKing
Comment from Willowsong
This is a well written acrostic with excellent use of vocabulary and imagery. The image is simplistic which adds to the message being portrayed. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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This is a well written acrostic with excellent use of vocabulary and imagery. The image is simplistic which adds to the message being portrayed. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much! :)
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You're welcome :)
