Lifer
Some prisons are not so bad;depends on the jailor22 total reviews
Comment from zanya
Oh so touching and so wonderful.So glad for you'blue eyes imprisoned my leg and heart'. Some lovely images here with powerful impact 'slowing the ship of matrimony'
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
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Oh so touching and so wonderful.So glad for you'blue eyes imprisoned my leg and heart'. Some lovely images here with powerful impact 'slowing the ship of matrimony'
Comment Written 06-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
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Glad you liked it! Thanks for commenting!
Comment from maggieadams
Very powerful. Marriage is hard work and the excitement goes quickly. Children can really tug and bind. Good for you to make it work and that you found happiness.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Very powerful. Marriage is hard work and the excitement goes quickly. Children can really tug and bind. Good for you to make it work and that you found happiness.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Thank yo, glad you liked it. I agree with your observations!
Comment from Smoothiecool
great picture
good luck in the contest
your words allow the reader to see and feel the image portrayed in this short story
wanting to be free and the plight of a little girl held you and how grateful you were
flows well easy read
cheers SC
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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great picture
good luck in the contest
your words allow the reader to see and feel the image portrayed in this short story
wanting to be free and the plight of a little girl held you and how grateful you were
flows well easy read
cheers SC
Comment Written 03-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Thank you, much appreciated!
Comment from Charlene0513
There is something to be said about the words and how they are spoken that really melts your heart.
Very excellent simile: My dissatisfactions grew like barnacles on a hull.
Charlene
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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There is something to be said about the words and how they are spoken that really melts your heart.
Very excellent simile: My dissatisfactions grew like barnacles on a hull.
Charlene
Comment Written 03-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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Thank you, Charlene, for reading and commenting so kindly.
Comment from judiverse
This is a beautiful story. The power of a little girl to keep the family together even though Dad was at the point of leaving. Excellent wording "imprisoned my leg and my heart.' "Like barnacles on a hull" is excellent. Good references to the imprisonment them with freedom day and entrapped. Best of luck in the contest. You got my vote. judi
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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This is a beautiful story. The power of a little girl to keep the family together even though Dad was at the point of leaving. Excellent wording "imprisoned my leg and my heart.' "Like barnacles on a hull" is excellent. Good references to the imprisonment them with freedom day and entrapped. Best of luck in the contest. You got my vote. judi
Comment Written 03-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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Your vote means a lot to me since I know you are an excellent writer. Thanks.
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Hi. You're welcome, and I thought your had a really heartfelt story.
Comment from nelliesellie
They say marriage is an institution. But it is one for willing prisoners. Bet you now know your wife didn't cause the fights. Fighting for a good life caused the fights. You were both in the same boat. Good work. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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They say marriage is an institution. But it is one for willing prisoners. Bet you now know your wife didn't cause the fights. Fighting for a good life caused the fights. You were both in the same boat. Good work. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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Thank you for your kind words and insights.
Comment from lancellot
Yes, life can present all types of prisons and then we age and learn that there are also many different forms of freedom. Great tale.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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Yes, life can present all types of prisons and then we age and learn that there are also many different forms of freedom. Great tale.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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Thank you! I agree.
Comment from RodG
Forty years ago I had several friends like the Speaker who felt like leaving their wives because they felt "chained" after marrying too young. Like this Speaker, theywere "held" back by the children they loved. Good simile of barnacles slowing the ship of matrimony.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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Forty years ago I had several friends like the Speaker who felt like leaving their wives because they felt "chained" after marrying too young. Like this Speaker, theywere "held" back by the children they loved. Good simile of barnacles slowing the ship of matrimony.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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Thanks! Your comments are appreciated.
Comment from Judy Couch
This is a good story and well written. I liked your comparison of dissatisfaction to barnacles on a ship. I really liked the ending.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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This is a good story and well written. I liked your comparison of dissatisfaction to barnacles on a ship. I really liked the ending.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Erik McGinley
Beautiful picture!
That sort of prison I think I would not mind as much as my own.
Kids may be a responsibility and a stress at times, but at least they are also a joy too.
GL in the comp :)
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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Beautiful picture!
That sort of prison I think I would not mind as much as my own.
Kids may be a responsibility and a stress at times, but at least they are also a joy too.
GL in the comp :)
Comment Written 03-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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Thank you and I appreciate your comments.