Night Guilt
Guilt never rests30 total reviews
Comment from ShirleyT1
I've recently returned to FanStory after being away a number of years, and was drawn to this story as I searched the all time best stories. I can certainly understand why this story received that recognition. It is excellently written and flows with intense suspense. You are a great writer!
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2021
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I've recently returned to FanStory after being away a number of years, and was drawn to this story as I searched the all time best stories. I can certainly understand why this story received that recognition. It is excellently written and flows with intense suspense. You are a great writer!
Comment Written 30-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2021
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Thank you. Welcome back.
Comment from Jawa78
I have just read Night Guilt.
I found your writing to be intriguing - the kind that conjures up mind pictures, leading the reader on with dawning understanding of what has happened. One great description I liked was "The devil's dentist"
I noticed you repeated the phrase "Much passed between them". Once with frank, and once with Dugan,I realize you might have done it consciously to tie the two relationships together?
a very well written story.
jawa78
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014
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I have just read Night Guilt.
I found your writing to be intriguing - the kind that conjures up mind pictures, leading the reader on with dawning understanding of what has happened. One great description I liked was "The devil's dentist"
I noticed you repeated the phrase "Much passed between them". Once with frank, and once with Dugan,I realize you might have done it consciously to tie the two relationships together?
a very well written story.
jawa78
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much. you got it.
Comment from JadieJones
Wow... Wow... This is my first 6 star rating. Brilliant, seamlessly complex. These characters will stick with me for a long time. I'm so impressed with their depth. I can see why this won a contest.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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Wow... Wow... This is my first 6 star rating. Brilliant, seamlessly complex. These characters will stick with me for a long time. I'm so impressed with their depth. I can see why this won a contest.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Erik McGinley
That was a very sad, beautifully crafted piece of work.
It raised old and very bitter old memories that I had long since hardened into callous non-existence.
I won't be thanking you for waking them up at three am in the morning right enough but I do thank you for a really nice short story.
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That was a very sad, beautifully crafted piece of work.
It raised old and very bitter old memories that I had long since hardened into callous non-existence.
I won't be thanking you for waking them up at three am in the morning right enough but I do thank you for a really nice short story.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2013
Comment from amada
Congratulations in winning the contest. This is a very absorbing and very pathetic story because it could happen in real life, over and over.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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Congratulations in winning the contest. This is a very absorbing and very pathetic story because it could happen in real life, over and over.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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Thank you very much, Amada
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Wow this is really a tear jerker. What a sad story.
I was too engrossed to notice any spags. The story held my interest from the very start to the finish, A good choice for the winner.Good Job. Nancy
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2013
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Wow this is really a tear jerker. What a sad story.
I was too engrossed to notice any spags. The story held my interest from the very start to the finish, A good choice for the winner.Good Job. Nancy
Comment Written 30-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2013
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Thank you, Nancy
Comment from caromel
Great story about the measures a mother will take to care for her child, especially around an abusive husband. You did a great job describing Frank. Very much about him revealed in so few words. Congratulations on winning the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2013
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Great story about the measures a mother will take to care for her child, especially around an abusive husband. You did a great job describing Frank. Very much about him revealed in so few words. Congratulations on winning the contest.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2013
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Thank you very much
Comment from irishauthorme
Hey, wanted to add my congrats for the contest, and also to compliment you on a fine piece of writing. Looked up your bio, was interesting learn you put some years in a profession I served for 22 years as a C/O in California. Now as a counselor you probably have a stiff case load and you get to listen all of the sniveling. To your credit, working in a prison surrounded by the depths of society changed you no doubt, but did not make you bitter or disillusioned. Will read some of your other efforts.
irish
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2013
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Hey, wanted to add my congrats for the contest, and also to compliment you on a fine piece of writing. Looked up your bio, was interesting learn you put some years in a profession I served for 22 years as a C/O in California. Now as a counselor you probably have a stiff case load and you get to listen all of the sniveling. To your credit, working in a prison surrounded by the depths of society changed you no doubt, but did not make you bitter or disillusioned. Will read some of your other efforts.
irish
Comment Written 30-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2013
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Thank you very much. I bet you have many interesting tales to write about. I appreciate the great review.
Comment from bellawolf
Wow!!I just finished reading your piece and it was awesome. I was so taken in by it that I found myself leaning in toward my computer screen as I read. My favorite part was when Dugan, hears the pitter patter of the little steps that started off the story. It brought the story around full circle. Wonderful! Congrats on your win!
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
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Wow!!I just finished reading your piece and it was awesome. I was so taken in by it that I found myself leaning in toward my computer screen as I read. My favorite part was when Dugan, hears the pitter patter of the little steps that started off the story. It brought the story around full circle. Wonderful! Congrats on your win!
Comment Written 29-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
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Thank you very much. I am happy that you enjoyed this short piece. I appreciate the awesome review and rating.
Comment from jgirlie152
lancellot, this story is most excellently written, but it is a horrible story. You must have dug into the very depths of your soul to imagine a grown man beating a child to death.
The fact that the mother stood by him and only shot him dead when she was overcome by laughter from his lack of manhood seems unbelievable. Don't get me wrong, I know these things happen, but the mother having allowed that beast to get away with his horrible crime, then having the love of the sheriff to soothe her ans still keep her secret makes me feel like, other than of course losing her daughter in such a horrible way, she should have turned him in at once. Some women have no respect for themselves or for their child(ren) and it makes me mad.
Your story is so well done you deserve to win the contest, but I can never forget the mother who was guilty by omission. (I know this was fiction, but it hit me hard).
Congratulations, Joan
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
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lancellot, this story is most excellently written, but it is a horrible story. You must have dug into the very depths of your soul to imagine a grown man beating a child to death.
The fact that the mother stood by him and only shot him dead when she was overcome by laughter from his lack of manhood seems unbelievable. Don't get me wrong, I know these things happen, but the mother having allowed that beast to get away with his horrible crime, then having the love of the sheriff to soothe her ans still keep her secret makes me feel like, other than of course losing her daughter in such a horrible way, she should have turned him in at once. Some women have no respect for themselves or for their child(ren) and it makes me mad.
Your story is so well done you deserve to win the contest, but I can never forget the mother who was guilty by omission. (I know this was fiction, but it hit me hard).
Congratulations, Joan
Comment Written 29-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
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Thank you very much, Joan
