I am Dave
a 50-word story9 total reviews
Comment from BethShelby
This is confusing until you think about it. If you a writer, you can be as many people as you want to be and sometime it drives you a little crazy to try to remember who your really are. Those characters have a way of taking over and arguing with you.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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This is confusing until you think about it. If you a writer, you can be as many people as you want to be and sometime it drives you a little crazy to try to remember who your really are. Those characters have a way of taking over and arguing with you.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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I hoped explaining the quotation marks would help.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
""Cleo felt she was losing her mind, said Claude." the reader may be drawn into this kind of craziness also. If you were trying to infect that it worked for me. A clever unfolding.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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""Cleo felt she was losing her mind, said Claude." the reader may be drawn into this kind of craziness also. If you were trying to infect that it worked for me. A clever unfolding.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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The whole piece fits between two quotation marks indicating one speaker.
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Still a little confusing for me but my ADD takes over
Comment from Mark Jackson
The dialogue sets up an intriguing premise and leaves the reader curious to learn more about Cleo's narrative and the roles of Claude and Dave within it. The brevity of the exchange adds to its impact, leaving room for interpretation and inviting readers to engage with the story on multiple levels. Well done!
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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The dialogue sets up an intriguing premise and leaves the reader curious to learn more about Cleo's narrative and the roles of Claude and Dave within it. The brevity of the exchange adds to its impact, leaving room for interpretation and inviting readers to engage with the story on multiple levels. Well done!
Comment Written 30-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Mark. After I finished, using the self-imposed fifty-word limit, I thought it would need punctuation fixed to make the scene clear.
Comment from Teri7
Bill, This is a very interesting story spoken by Dave. You used very good descriptive dialogue and very interesting words. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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Bill, This is a very interesting story spoken by Dave. You used very good descriptive dialogue and very interesting words. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 29-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Teri
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you are so welcome! Blessings, Teri
Comment from lyenochka
Oh - since it was the same person, I realized what you had done with the quotation marks. I feel like I'm reading the words of a multi-personality writer. That can help with the dialogue!
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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Oh - since it was the same person, I realized what you had done with the quotation marks. I feel like I'm reading the words of a multi-personality writer. That can help with the dialogue!
Comment Written 29-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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I placed it in the notes as it can be confusing.
Comment from jim vecchio
With the wifi going off regularly here, I am having conversations with myself as I slowly go crazy. Only one of me speaks in a language I can't understand.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2024
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With the wifi going off regularly here, I am having conversations with myself as I slowly go crazy. Only one of me speaks in a language I can't understand.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2024
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See I, Jim
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As I said, my internet keeps going in and out. If I seem to ignore you, you didn't get lucky, I just had trouble getting through.
Comment from nomi338
Huh? Just how many people live inside the complicated mind of you Billy Schott? I am about as confused as I have ever been by you. I swear, reading you is as exciting as a ride on a roller coaster. Thrills from beginning to end. Woo hoo!
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2024
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Huh? Just how many people live inside the complicated mind of you Billy Schott? I am about as confused as I have ever been by you. I swear, reading you is as exciting as a ride on a roller coaster. Thrills from beginning to end. Woo hoo!
Comment Written 29-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2024
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I think I am pleased.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I thought I'd be confused, but I wasn't, which is unusual for me as I easily get confused these days, much enjoyed Bill, a fun post, love Dolly x x x x
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2024
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I thought I'd be confused, but I wasn't, which is unusual for me as I easily get confused these days, much enjoyed Bill, a fun post, love Dolly x x x x
Comment Written 29-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Dolly.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
I have so many questions. If everyone speaking is Dave, then why did Dave tell me just yesterday that I could call him Al? I think Dave is lying to one of us!
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2024
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I have so many questions. If everyone speaking is Dave, then why did Dave tell me just yesterday that I could call him Al? I think Dave is lying to one of us!
Comment Written 29-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2024
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Himself, most likely.
